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Education in financial management should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Education in financial management should be a mandatory component of the school program. with this statement? v. 1
In this day and age, the topic of whether education at school with both of the genders has been a contentious issue ever since the initiation of women's right movement. While others refuted this. Both sides of this debate will be analysed in this essay before a reasoned conclusion is drawn. First and foremost, co-education could be led, to be better communication with the opposite gender in real life. For example, if children will become an adult, then they find a job or marry with a partner, those people who spend time with a different sex, and result in living standard is far higher than those who with went to separate school. In addition, they are able to more understanding and have a complementary attitude as spending time together. On top of that, teenagers who had the opportunity to meet boys or girls naturally would be greatly helpful that establish the conception of gender role and have a health relationship each other. It also could form their character. On the other hand, it is undeniable that those children with went to separate school may less report of sex discrimination by giving more chance to specific sex. Furthermore, in this system, students tend to be more focused on studies rather than being distracted to all fantasies of teenage. Nevertheless, in my perspective, when students are educated together, it would bring out the best youth who could serve as a torchbearer for posterity by making them aware of their own limits the culture of the society
In this day and age, the topic of whether education at school with both of the genders has been a contentious issue ever since the initiation of women's right movement. While others refuted this. Both sides of this debate will be
analysed
in this essay
before
a reasoned conclusion
is drawn
.

First
and foremost, co-education could
be led
, to be better communication with the opposite gender in real life.
For example
, if children will become an adult, then they find a job or
marry with
a partner, those
people
who
spend time with a
different
sex, and result in living standard is far higher than those
who
with went to separate school.
In addition
, they are able to more understanding and have a complementary attitude as spending time together.
On top of that
,
teenagers
who
had the opportunity to
meet
boys or girls
naturally
would be
greatly
helpful that establish the conception of gender role and have a health relationship each other. It
also
could form their character.

On the other hand
, it is undeniable that those children with went to separate school may less report of sex discrimination by giving more chance to specific sex.
Furthermore
, in this system, students tend to be more focused on studies
rather
than
being distracted
to all fantasies of teenage.

Nevertheless
, in my perspective, when students
are educated
together, it would bring out the best youth
who
could serve as a torchbearer for posterity by making them aware of their
own
limits the culture of the society
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Education in financial management should be a mandatory component of the school program. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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