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Education in financial management should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.3

Education in financial management should be a mandatory component of the school program. with this statement? v. 3
It is a fact that financial management play a very good role in the overall development of the nations. I admit that, education in financial management should be a mandatory component of the school curriculum. Main aim of this essay is to discuss both views and to draw a conclusion. Admittedly, vast study topics and tough topics affects the learning capacity of students. This factors make them feel difficult to follow the subjects. Calculations and hard portions are the parts of financial management. Students are not directly involved in the process of finance until they get into a specific job. Another face is illegal use of knowledge in this field. Children are not logical thinkers to make proper decisions regarding highly sophisticated technology and calculations. However, stil I support advantages surge over disadvantages. Basic lessons of finances, are making them easy in participation of further studies. It is a diplomatic change in the field of finance and economy. It helps to avoid tragic errors and feel them hopeful. For example; we learn certain songs in childhood. That we are able to remember when we become adult. Learning theories take part more efficient role in this context. In addition, comprehensive and cognitive behaviour of learning leads to the perfect overall development. It reduces jobless people. it will cause dramatic improvement in the field of business. Minute change in the school curriculum affects all field in the nation development. To site an example; in olden days number of people who indulge in business were less compared to current era. Proper design of the study topics, interesting structure, and minimum content, these all are the general factors makes the topics more interesting. By the way people can learn the subject successfully. Learning topics in the early life is better than overloading the knowledge later. We can hope that, coming generations of financial members has a proper knowledge outfits.
It is a fact that
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financial
management play a
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very
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good
role in the
overall
development of the nations. I admit that, education in
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financial
management should be a mandatory component of the school curriculum. Main aim of this essay is to discuss both views and to draw a conclusion.

Admittedly
, vast study
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topics
and tough
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topics
affects the
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learning
capacity of students.
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This
factors
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make
them feel difficult to follow the subjects. Calculations and
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hard
portions are the parts of
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financial
management. Students are not
directly
involved in the process of finance until they
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get
into a specific job. Another face is illegal
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use
of knowledge in this
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field
. Children are not logical thinkers to
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make
proper decisions regarding
highly
sophisticated technology and calculations.

However
,
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I support advantages surge over disadvantages. Basic lessons of finances, are making them easy in participation of
further
studies. It is a diplomatic
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change
in the
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field
of finance and economy. It
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helps
to avoid tragic errors and feel them hopeful.
For example
; we learn certain songs in childhood. That we are able to remember when we become adult.
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Learning
theories
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take part
more efficient role in this context.

In addition
, comprehensive and cognitive
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behaviour
of
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learning
leads to the perfect
overall
development. It
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reduces
jobless
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people
.
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it
will cause dramatic improvement in the
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field
of business. Minute
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change
in the school curriculum affects all
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field
in the nation development. To site an example; in olden days number of
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people
who indulge in business were less compared to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
era.

Proper design of the study
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topics
, interesting structure, and minimum content, these all are the general factors
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makes
the
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topics
more interesting. By the way
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can learn the subject
successfully
.
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Learning
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topics
in the early life is better than overloading the knowledge later. We can hope that, coming generations of
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financial
members has
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a proper knowledge
outfits.
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17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Education in financial management should be a mandatory component of the school program. with this statement? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
315 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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