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Should wealthy nations be required to share theirwealth among poorer nations by providing such thingsas food and education? Or us it the responsibility ofthe governments of poorer nations to look after theircitizens themselves v.2

Should wealthy nations be required to share theirwealth among poorer nations by providing such thingsas food and education? Or us it the responsibility ofthe governments of poorer nations to look after theircitizens themselves v. 2
I think that wealthy nations should share their prosperous resources with the poorly nations to improve their living by offering food and education. Reasons to share their wealth are: • To Build up humanity • To Improve friendship in neighbouring countries • To save the lives of people Whenever famine hits the country, it wipes out all their crops and let the people suffer from starvation. One such example is Somalia where people died like flies under starvation. It is the duty of other nations to support their cause by providing food in their need. Thus it keeps the humanity alive and pass on to the next generation. It inspires others to be humane. In case of undeveloped countries, it is not easy to provide quality education to youngsters by their government. Thus the developed nations should lend them the way for their studies. Since youth is the backbone of their land, it is inevitable for them to acquire proper graduation. This builds up healthy relationship between provinces as they are benefited by their nearest countries. Sharing should not be stopped with food and education alone. It includes saving the lives of people when the nearby country faces the natural calamities. In those situations, it is important to send their troops to the affected territory in order to reduce the casualties. The required medical support should be dispatched to treat the wounded people. I conclude that sharing to the needy people is the best way to spend the money as it replinish the dying humanity and creates the bonding between countries.
I
think
that wealthy nations should share their

prosperous resources with the
poorly
nations to

improve
their living by offering food and education.

Reasons to share their wealth are:

• To Build up humanity

• To
Improve
friendship in
neighbouring
countries •
To save the
lives
of
people


Whenever famine hits the
country
, it wipes out all

their
crops and
let
the
people
suffer from starvation.

One such example is Somalia where
people
died
like

flies
under starvation. It is the duty of other
nations


to
support their cause by providing food in their need.

Thus
it
keeps
the humanity alive and pass on to the

next
generation. It inspires others to be humane.

In case of undeveloped
countries
, it is not easy to

provide quality education to youngsters by their

government
.
Thus
the developed nations should
lend


them
the way for their studies. Since youth is
the


backbone of their land, it is inevitable for them to

acquire
proper graduation. This builds up
healthy


relationship between provinces as they
are benefited


by
their nearest countries.

Sharing should not be
stopped
with food and education

alone
. It includes saving the
lives
of
people
when
the


nearby
country
faces the natural calamities. In
those


situations, it is
important
to
send
their troops to the

affected
territory in order to
reduce
the casualties.

The required medical support should
be dispatched
to

treat
the wounded
people
.

I conclude that sharing to the needy
people
is
the

best
way to spend the money as it
replinish
the dying

humanity
and creates the bonding between
countries
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26Mistakes

IELTS essay Should wealthy nations be required to share theirwealth among poorer nations by providing such thingsas food and education? Or us it the responsibility ofthe governments of poorer nations to look after theircitizens themselves v. 2

Essay
  American English
32 paragraphs
261 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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