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Eating too much sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people's sugar consumption while others think that is individual's responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat v.5

Eating too much sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people's sugar consumption while others think that is individual's responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat v. 5
Undoubtedly, over consumption of sugary foods is detrimental to our well being. Consequently, it is thought by some that the lawmakers should be responsible to curb the intake of sugars by the people. Others, however, believe that it is the individual's duty to reduce the quantity of sugars he or she consumes. In my opinion, I consider that the government is in the best position to curb this trend because they have the authority to enact strict laws on company producing high sugar content products. On the one hand, some people have suggested that government should be responsible to benchmark people's sugar intake and I agree. Firstly, legislators can impose contingent laws on production companies that manufacture sugar related products. This is because the problem of eating too much sugar starts with the companies that produces them. For instance, NAFDAC, a food regulatory body in Nigeria, provided a guide for the maximum sugar level to be included in each product before release to the public. Furthermore, if lawmakers allow the people to consume much sugar, it will result in health issues such as diabetes and obesity. In the long run, treating these problems could result in allocating more funds into the health sector which could be invested in other sectors. On the other hand, other people opine that it is the individual's duty to restrict the amount of sugar to eat. The reason for this is that people can decide to consume whatever he or she chooses. They have access to the products, either in shops, at workplace or at school. So, to purchase and eat such products is their decision. Moreover, they feel the pains of any consequences that might result from taking too much sugar. Hyperglyceamia, for instance, is associated with frequent rigour, excessive sweating and polyuria especially at night. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I believe that government should impose precautionary measures in controlling people's consumption of sugars in order to avoid spending extra fund in the health sector.
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, over consumption of sugary foods is detrimental to our
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well being
.
Consequently
, it is
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thought
by
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some
that the lawmakers should be responsible to curb the intake of
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sugars
by the
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people
. Others,
however
, believe that it is the individual's duty to
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reduce
the quantity of
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sugars
he or she consumes. In my opinion, I consider that the
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government
is in the best position to curb this trend
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because
they have the authority to enact strict laws on
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company
producing high
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sugar
content products.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
have suggested that
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government
should be responsible to benchmark
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people
's
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sugar
intake and I
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agree
.
Firstly
, legislators can impose contingent laws on production
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companies
that manufacture
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sugar
related
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products
. This is
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because
the problem of eating too much
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sugar
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starts
with the
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companies
that produces them.
For instance
, NAFDAC, a food regulatory body in Nigeria, provided a guide for the maximum
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sugar
level to
be included
in each
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product
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before
release to the public.
Furthermore
, if lawmakers
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allow
the
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people
to consume much
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sugar
, it will result in health issues such as diabetes and obesity. In the long run, treating these problems could result in allocating more funds into the health sector which could
be invested
in
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other
sectors.

On the
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other
hand,
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other
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people
opine that it is the individual's duty to restrict the amount of
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sugar
to eat.
The reason for this is
that
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people
can decide to consume whatever he or she chooses. They have access to the
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products
, either in shops, at workplace or at school.
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So
, to
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purchase
and eat such
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products
is their decision.
Moreover
, they feel the pains of any consequences that might result from taking too much
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sugar
.
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Hyperglyceamia
,
for instance
,
is associated
with frequent
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rigour
, excessive sweating and
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polyuria
especially
at night.

In conclusion
, while
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people
may vary in their opinions, I believe that
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government
should impose precautionary measures in controlling
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people
's consumption of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sugars
in order to avoid spending extra fund in the health sector.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Eating too much sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people's sugar consumption while others think that is individual's responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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