Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that the government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of the public. v.2

The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that the government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of the public. v. 2
It is a true fact that governments all arount the world have to deal with the duty to choose where to invest the limited amount of resources available. One of those many field where to invest can be the research of living creatures outside of our planet. On the one hand, investments of this type are at the foundation of progress. In the past it happened many and many times that researches of this kind, previously seen as too much futuristic and abstract, ended up with astonishing results, writing pages of history. As instance, the landing of the man on the moon had a similar feeling, but eventually they really manage to get it done. Moreover, considering the dimensions of the known universe, the chanses that the correct conditions have been verified only on our planet are less than the one that there is life somewhere else. On the other hand, the world is facing an incredible amount of more basic challenges that can be easily addessed with the money invested in those discovery programs, namely the poverty, the lack of education in developing countries, and the last but most important, the climate change. Although all of this is true, in my opinion there should be a balanced division between the expenses in life discovery and other actual topics. In conclusion, It may be true that the topic of life discovery in other planet is not completely understood by most of the people, for reasons such as the lack of education or curiosity. Nevertheless, I firmly think that a non negligible amount of public money should be invested on these topics.
It is a true fact that
governments
all
arount
the world
have to
deal with the duty to choose where to invest the limited amount of resources available. One of those
many field
where to invest can be the research of living creatures
outside of
our planet.

On the one hand, investments of this type are at the foundation of progress. In the past it happened
many
and
many
times that researches of this kind, previously
seen
as too much futuristic and abstract, ended up with astonishing results, writing pages of history. As instance, the landing of the
man
on the moon had a similar feeling,
but
eventually
they
really
manage to
get
it done.
Moreover
, considering the dimensions of the known universe, the
chanses
that the correct conditions have
been verified
only
on our planet are less than the one that there is life somewhere else.

On the other hand
, the world is facing an incredible amount of more basic challenges that can be
easily
addessed
with the money invested in those discovery programs,
namely
the poverty, the lack of education in
developing countries
, and the last
but
most
important
, the climate
change
. Although all of this is true, in my opinion there should be a balanced division between the expenses in life discovery and other actual topics.

In conclusion
, It may be true that the topic of life discovery in other planet is not completely understood by most of the
people
, for reasons such as the lack of education or curiosity.
Nevertheless
, I
firmly
think
that a
non negligible
amount of public money should
be invested
on these topics.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that the government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of the public. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts