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Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. v. 2
Technological breakthroughs have indeed a huge impact on people’s everyday lives. However, it is considered that advancements on earlier technology have more significant benefits on majority as compared with the latest discoveries and inventions these could ever offer. On my point of view, even though it is obvious that previous developments are continuously helping our lives, I still believe that the recent ones would definitely change our daily living and probably we will be dependent on these in the near future as well. Given the appliances and gadgets that we have on our homes, for example, our washing machine, vacuum cleaner, telephones and television, these are inventions in the past that are continuously improving to make our lives better. Most of these things are improvised to a smart devices which help us lessen the manual efforts we do to complete a certain task like cleaning & drying. Moreover, our telephones and tv become smart mobile phones & tv which can now be connected to the internet which allows us to communicate even from the farthest corner of the earth. Smart TVs, likewise, provide us more choices of shows for entertainment. Having said that, it is undoubtedly accurate that these technologies have definitely improve the way we live. However, it is supported by some that recent technology and developments that are taken in place would not benefit humanity like what the earlier technology has been doing. As opposed to this, inventions & discoveries like GPS, mobile applications, robotics automation, artificial intelligence are still for continuous research and study for the betterment of everyone’s life, including the ordinary ones. For instance, mobile application are available and are helping nowadays for our transportation, shopping and entertainment which are almost impossible before to think that it would fit in a pocket for just a click from a small gadget. Automation & artificial intelligence were just a thing in private companies before, like business and healthcare establishments which eliminates manual and clerical process and even aid in the field of medicine and surgery. Nevertheless, it becomes almost available as well in our homes like applications namely Siri, Alexa, Bixby & Google which we use their intelligence to help us in our certain part of our daily lives. In conclusion, though the recent developments are still under study, I believe that it will eventually impact our lives just like the earlier inventions that makes our lives easier. Just like other technologies, these will eventually become cheaper that would also allow ordinary people to have access on it and makes lives more comfortable.
Technological breakthroughs have
indeed
a huge impact on
people
’s everyday
lives
.
However
, it
is considered
that advancements on earlier
technology
have more significant benefits on majority as compared with the latest discoveries and inventions these could ever offer. On my point of view,
even though
it is obvious that previous developments are
continuously
helping our
lives
, I
still
believe that the recent
ones
would definitely
change
our daily living and
probably
we will be dependent on these in the near future
as well
.

Given
the appliances and gadgets that we have on our homes,
for example
, our washing machine, vacuum cleaner, telephones and television, these are inventions in the past that are
continuously
improving to
make
our
lives
better. Most of these things
are improvised
to a smart
devices
which
help
us lessen the manual efforts we do to complete a certain task like cleaning & drying.
Moreover
, our telephones and
tv
become smart mobile phones &
tv
which can
now
be connected
to the internet which
allows
us to communicate even from the farthest corner of the earth. Smart TVs,
likewise
, provide us more choices of
shows
for entertainment. Having said that, it is
undoubtedly
accurate that these
technologies
have definitely
improve
the way we
live
.

However
, it
is supported
by
some
that recent
technology
and developments that
are taken
in place would not benefit humanity like what the earlier
technology
has been doing. As opposed to this, inventions & discoveries like GPS, mobile applications, robotics automation, artificial intelligence are
still
for continuous research and study for the betterment of everyone’s life, including the ordinary
ones
.
For instance
, mobile application are available and are helping nowadays for our transportation, shopping and entertainment which are almost impossible
before
to
think
that it would fit in a pocket for
just
a click from a
small
gadget. Automation & artificial intelligence were
just
a thing in private
companies
before
, like business and healthcare establishments which eliminates manual and clerical process and even aid in the field of medicine and surgery.
Nevertheless
, it becomes almost available
as well
in our homes like applications
namely
Siri, Alexa, Bixby & Google which we
use
their intelligence to
help
us in our certain part of our daily
lives
.

In conclusion
, though the recent developments are
still
under study, I believe that it will
eventually
impact our
lives
just
like the earlier inventions that
makes
our
lives
easier.
Just
like other
technologies
, these will
eventually
become cheaper that would
also
allow
ordinary
people
to have access on it and
makes
lives
more comfortable.
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13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
426 words
6
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