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eading run scorer in Cricket is an alumini from an college of our state. The reason was that, there was sufficient facilities and funding for the sports department of that university due to which the students from that college could get proper training in v.1

eading run scorer in Cricket is an alumini from an college of our state. The reason was that, there was sufficient facilities and funding for the sports department of that university due to which the students from that college could get proper training in v. 1
The technological revolution affects all countries around the world in many ways significantly. It seems that the traditional skills and the ways life used to be present have disappeared. This essay will discuss how the technology has led to this case and whether it is worth attempting to save people's traditional life or not. To begin with, there are various reasons why traditional skills no longer exist as it was many years ago. One major reason is the development of technology. For illustrations, modern technology has been used for many tasks such as agriculture, industries, and the machines have replaced people’s manual tasks in most cases. Moreover, the internet alters the way of communication dramatically; instead of visiting family these days, for example, people speak with each other over the phone or chat using social media like Facebook or Twitter. Perhaps, that is why the traditional skills are expiring with the demand if time and modernization. Let's move to another point in the statement: some people argue that the traditional experience shouldn't be saved. The principal reason for their opinion is that global advertising encourages everyone to buy the same products. For instance, people wear similar clothes, rather than traditional costumes, and eat from the same types of restaurants such as KFC and Mac Donald and their branches are present all over the world. This shows that it does not make sense to keep the traditional skills alive. To conclude, this essay has looked at the possible reasons of die out of traditional life, such as the revolution in technology and popularity of the internet, and also the reason why it is aimless to keep them alive.
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technology
has led to this case and whether it is worth attempting to save
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skills
no longer exist as it was
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many
years ago. One major
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reason
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technology
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technology
has been
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used
for
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tasks such as agriculture, industries, and the machines have replaced
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people’s
manual tasks
in most cases
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dramatically
;
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,
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people
speak with each other over the phone or chat using social media like Facebook or Twitter. Perhaps,
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why the
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traditional
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skills
are expiring with the demand if time and modernization.

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to another point in the statement:
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experience shouldn't
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. The principal
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reason
for their opinion is that global advertising encourages everyone to
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buy
the same products.
For instance
,
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people
wear similar clothes,
rather
than
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traditional
costumes, and eat from the same types of restaurants such as KFC and Mac Donald and their branches are present all over the world. This
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shows
that it does not
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keep
the
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traditional
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skills
alive.

To conclude
, this essay has looked at the possible
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reasons
of
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die
out of
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traditional
life, such as the revolution in
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technology
and popularity of the internet, and
also
the
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reason
why it is aimless to
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keep
them alive.
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IELTS essay eading run scorer in Cricket is an alumini from an college of our state. The reason was that, there was sufficient facilities and funding for the sports department of that university due to which the students from that college could get proper training in v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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