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Due to the use of the computers and mobile phones, letter-writing ability is disappearing. To what extent do you agree? Write at least 250 words. v.2

Due to the use of the computers and mobile phones, letter-writing ability is disappearing. v. 2
Technology innovation is skyrockering around the world which makes human day-to-day activities easier as compare to past. In the phethora of technology invention, the computer and mobile phone are one of the best and successful machine of innovation, where humans can perform more than one action simultaneously with less time consumption. I agree that with the help this gadgets the letter-writing, a past activity, is replaced to mail writing with more pros. Firstly, when the electronic components started to develop, the humans began to curious about to use those components like computer, mobile phone etc, . For example, the humans are started to use calculator in phones and computers instead of using calculator, this make to reduce the sale and usuage of calculator in a day-to-day activity. The people start to forget the using product and move to the new product, if it is more comfort and easy to work. Likewise, the letter writing is vanised because of the writing in computer through mail and sending essential messages through cell phone, but begin to use them to know who its work, latter the features attracted the people and started to fell in the hands of technology. Secondly, the expense to write a letter to others is higher when compare to send a message or mail through electronic device. For instance, each letter would be send through post office department and charges wil be applicable to every letter depends upon the location it reaches. But, in electronic gadgets, only once the amount will be spend on buying the product, after that any number of writing can be send without any charges to anyone in the world through internet or telecommunication. In addition, the time consumption to send the script information has less time in computer or mobile phone, whereas the time usuage is higher like two to three days to obtain the writing information through letter to the receiver. To conclude, the letter writing was an useful method in ancient days to send and receive information. While, the technology invention like computer, mobile phone has made a great changes in the world trend by adding more features and consume less time to collect the writing information.
Technology innovation is
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skyrockering
around the world which
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makes
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human
day-to-day activities easier
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as
compare to past. In the
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phethora
of technology invention, the computer and mobile
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phone
are one of the best and successful machine of innovation, where
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humans
can perform more than one action
simultaneously
with less
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time
consumption. I
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agree
that with the
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help
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this
gadgets the letter-writing, a past activity,
is replaced
to mail
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writing
with more pros.

Firstly
, when the electronic components
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started
to develop, the
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humans
began to curious about to
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use
those components like computer, mobile
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phone
etc
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, .
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, the
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humans
are
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started
to
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use
calculator in
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phones
and computers
instead
of using calculator, this
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make
to
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reduce
the sale and
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usuage
of calculator in a day-to-day activity. The
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people
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start
to forget the using product and
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move
to the new product, if it is more comfort and easy to work.
Likewise
, the
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letter
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writing
is
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vanised
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because
of the
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writing
in computer
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through
mail and sending essential messages
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through
cell
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phone
,
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but
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begin
to
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use
them to know who its work, latter the features attracted the
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people
and
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started
to fell in the hands of technology.

Secondly
, the expense to write a
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letter
to others is higher when compare to
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send
a message or mail
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through
electronic device.
For instance
, each
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letter
would be
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send
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through
post office department and charges
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wil
be applicable to every
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letter
depends upon the location it reaches.
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But
, in electronic gadgets,
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only
once the amount will be
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spend
on buying the product, after that any number of
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writing
can be
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send
without any charges to anyone in the world
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through
internet or telecommunication.
In addition
, the
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time
consumption to
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send
the script
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information
has less
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time
in computer or mobile
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phone
, whereas the
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time
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usuage
is higher like two to three days to obtain the
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writing
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information
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through
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letter
to the receiver.

To conclude
, the
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letter
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writing
was
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an
useful method in ancient days to
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send
and receive
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information
. While, the technology invention like computer, mobile
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phone
has made a great
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changes
in the world trend by adding more features and consume less
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time
to collect the
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writing
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information
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS essay Due to the use of the computers and mobile phones, letter-writing ability is disappearing. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
6.5
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