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With the increase in the use of mobile phones and computers, fewer people are writing letters. Some people think that the traditional skill of writing letters will disappear completely. How important do you think letter writing is? Do you thin letter writi v.2

With the increase in the use of mobile phones and computers, fewer people are writing letters. Some people think that the traditional skill of writing letters will disappear completely. How important do you think letter writing is? Do you thin letter writi v. 2
Undoubtedly, these days, it is often argued that people are not happy, neither with whatever they have, nor with whatever they will obtain. I fully agree with this fact that not at all people get full satisfaction with whatever they have and they always try to get something more and something different. In turn, this essay will discuss two main reasons of this fact. On the one hand, people think that as they get older, the necessities of them become more, which cause humans to convert to a miserable one. That is to say that children would be completely convinced with small things and consequently they are always happy, while adults are totally inverse, thus adult humans have to learn from their children, quotes from psychiatrists. For example, no doubt, all of us in 20 years old, only needed a mobile phone, but in 30 years old, we want to buy a car and in a 40 year old, we will desire to buy a home, which can affect us to be sad if we would not be able to achieve them. On the other hand, the nature of humans is totalitarian. For several millions of years, people tried to obtain more and more to discover different things and this fact affected people to evolve such a monopolist. To summarize, some people are of the opinion that people would never be happy with what they have if they feel that they need more, while others are opposed to this view. I am sure that humans try to add their assets more and more every day and based on this fact, they will never be happy with everything that they have.
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, these days, it is
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people
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, neither with whatever they have, nor with whatever they will obtain. I
fully
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agree
with this fact that not at all
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people
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get
full satisfaction with whatever they
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have and
they always try to
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get
something more and something
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. In turn, this essay will discuss two main reasons of this fact.

On the one hand,
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people
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that as they
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older, the necessities of them become more, which cause
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humans
to convert to a miserable one.
That is
to say that children would be completely convinced with
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small
things and
consequently
they are always
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happy
, while adults are
totally
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adult
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humans
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learn from their children, quotes from psychiatrists.
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, no doubt, all of us in 20 years
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,
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needed a mobile phone,
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in 30 years
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, we want to
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a car and in a 40
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, we will desire to
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buy
a home, which can affect us to be sad if we would not be able to achieve them.

On the other hand
, the nature of
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humans
is totalitarian. For several millions of years,
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people
tried to obtain more and more to discover
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different
things and this fact
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affected
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people
to evolve such a monopolist.

To summarize
,
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some
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people
are of the opinion that
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people
would never be
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happy
with what they have if they feel that they need more, while others
are opposed
to this view. I am sure that
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humans
try to
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add
their assets more and more every day and based on this fact, they will never be
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happy
with everything that they have.
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IELTS essay With the increase in the use of mobile phones and computers, fewer people are writing letters. Some people think that the traditional skill of writing letters will disappear completely. How important do you think letter writing is? Do you thin letter writi v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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