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Due to the development of the internet, public libraries are no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

Due to the development of the internet, public libraries are no longer necessary. v. 5
It is argued that since the digital technologies has developed so fast that public libraries are completely redundant. I totally disagree with that point of view because public libraries are always reliable source of information and socially important for every community The First reason why public libraries are vital that it is reliable. It is irrefutable that as digital technologies are becoming advanced, more and more people became dependent on the websites which made easier the way of people’s life. Online libraries are not exception that most people use to read e-books not only to get entertained, but also for the research of their academic purposes. However, online resources cannot be used as reliable source this is because one may get unreliable data which was incorrect as the online websites are not able to filter false info, but public libraries can store the most reliable tip since the publication of books are checked thoroughly by publishers which make them more reliable than the modern web resources. As an example, the book which is called “The Lord of the Flies” by William Golding was rejected 21 times before it had been published. Hence, it seems to me that public libraries are still essential to be preserved. The second reason is that public libraries provides communication. These days the ubiquity of online platforms, particularly, social networking sites is prone to take people’s precious time, which may eventually lead to isolation from the society. While, Public libraries serve as a provision of gathering place for everyone in person. What I mean here is that if citizens interact with each other who have the same interests, they will have a sense of community. Furthermore, it is likely that the youth can improve their social skills which will definitely help them this virtue to apply for a job by attending to the libraries instead of spending their whole time on the online platform. For instance, Bill Gates have read more than 100 books in the library by dint of attending to the libraries. Thus, it does make sense to have libraries. In conclusion, Although there are some people who are of the opinion that libraries are not needed, I believe that libraries are an essential asset to provide resources which are trustworthy and to make people more sociable. Hence, It is highly advisable to keep libraries open to public.
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is argued
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that
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libraries are completely redundant. I
totally
disagree with that point of view
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because
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public
libraries are always
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reliable
source of information and
socially
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important
for every community

The
First
reason why
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public
libraries are vital that it is
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reliable
. It is irrefutable that as digital technologies are becoming advanced, more and more
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people
became dependent on the websites which made easier the way of
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people’s
life.
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Online
libraries are not exception that most
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people
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use
to read e-books not
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only
to
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get
entertained,
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but
also
for the research of their academic purposes.
However
,
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online
resources cannot be
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used
as
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reliable
source this is
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because
one may
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get
unreliable data which was incorrect as the
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online
websites are not able to filter false info,
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but
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public
libraries can store the most
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reliable
tip since the publication of books are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
thoroughly
by publishers which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reliable
than the modern web resources. As an example, the book which
is called
“The Lord of the Flies” by William Golding
was rejected
21 times
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before
it had
been published
.
Hence
, it seems to me that
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public
libraries are
still
essential to
be preserved
.

The second reason is that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
libraries provides communication. These days the ubiquity of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
platforms,
particularly
, social networking sites is prone to take
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people’s
precious time, which may
eventually
lead to isolation from the society. While,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Public
libraries serve as a provision of gathering place for everyone in person. What I mean here is that if citizens interact with each other who have the same interests, they will have a sense of community.
Furthermore
, it is likely that the youth can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their social
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
which will definitely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them this virtue to apply for a job by attending to the libraries
instead
of spending their whole time on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
platform.
For instance
, Bill Gates have read more than 100 books in the library by dint of attending to the libraries.
Thus
, it does
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sense to have libraries.

In conclusion
, Although there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who are of the opinion that libraries are not needed, I believe that libraries are an essential asset to provide resources which are trustworthy and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
more sociable.
Hence
, It is
highly
advisable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
libraries open to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Due to the development of the internet, public libraries are no longer necessary. v. 5

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
394 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
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