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Due to the development of the internet, public libraries are no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Due to the development of the internet, public libraries are no longer necessary. v. 1
It is argued that as the usage of the internet is growing rapidly, public libraries are completely useless. This essay totally disagrees with that because public libraries are always reliable and socially important matter. The First reason why public libraries are vital that it is their reliability. It is irrefutable that as digital technologies are becoming advanced, more and more people are dependent on the internet which made easier the way of people’s life. Online libraries are not an exception that most people use to read e-books not only to get entertained but also for the research of their academic purposes. However, online resources cannot be used as reliable source because one may get false information as the internet is not able to filter false information but public libraries can store the most reliable information since the publication of books are checked thoroughly by publishers which make them more reliable than the internet resources. As an example, “The Lord of the Flies” by William Golding was rejected 21 times before it had been published. Hence, it seems to me that public libraries are still essential to be preserved. Another reason is that public libraries are the best way to keep in touch with the people who have much in common. These days the ubiquity of social networking sites are prone to take people’s precious time which may eventually lead to isolation from the society. While, Public libraries serve as a provision of gathering place in person. What I mean here is that if citizens interact with each other who have same interests, they will have a sense of community. Furthermore, it is likelihood that the youth can improve their social skills which is necessary attribute to apply for a job in the future by attending to the libraries. Therefore, it does make sense to have libraries. In conclusion, I believe that libraries are more useful than the internet to provide resources which are trustworthy and make people more sociable.
It
is argued
that as the usage of the internet is growing
rapidly
,
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public
libraries are completely useless. This essay
totally
disagrees with that
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because
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public
libraries are always
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reliable
and
socially
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important
matter.

The
First
reason why
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public
libraries are vital that it is their reliability. It is irrefutable that as digital technologies are becoming advanced, more and more
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people
are dependent on the internet which made easier the way of
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people’s
life. Online libraries are not an exception that most
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people
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use
to read e-books not
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only
to
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get
entertained
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but
also
for the research of their academic purposes.
However
, online resources cannot be
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used
as
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reliable
source
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because
one may
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get
false information as the internet is not able to filter false information
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but
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public
libraries can store the most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reliable
information since the publication of books are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
thoroughly
by publishers which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reliable
than the internet resources. As an example, “The Lord of the Flies” by William Golding
was rejected
21 times
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before
it had
been published
.
Hence
, it seems to me that
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public
libraries are
still
essential to
be preserved
.

Another reason is that
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public
libraries are the best way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
in touch with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who have much in common. These days the ubiquity of social networking sites are prone to take
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people’s
precious time which may
eventually
lead to isolation from the society. While,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Public
libraries serve as a provision of gathering place in person. What I mean here is that if citizens interact with each other who have same interests, they will have a sense of community.
Furthermore
, it is likelihood that the youth can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their social
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
which is necessary attribute to apply for a job in the future by attending to the libraries.
Therefore
, it does
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sense to have libraries.

In conclusion
, I believe that libraries are more useful than the internet to provide resources which are trustworthy and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
more sociable.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Due to the development of the internet, public libraries are no longer necessary. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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