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Drivers should pay a fee in city street when there is a heavy traffic. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.1

Drivers should pay a fee in city street when there is a heavy traffic. v. 1
It has been well discussed around the globe that drivers should provide a price in the town street when there is huge rush in the roadway. Like every coin, it also has two sides. It will shed light on both before drawing a logical conclusion. On one side of the issue, people think that it brings many positive aspects. The first one can be said that if will they can pay the money to the transport surgeon when they are in the traffic these moneys can use for the development of the roads. By this amount, the government can establish traffic light in the city as well enlarge the side of the roads. For instance, Driver will be more beneficial when they are driving on the road by the helping of traffic light also accident will decrease. On the flip side, others hold some opposite view which cannot be neglected. To begin with drivers have not enough ability to give money as for the traffic in the city. Government should take initiative for eradicating this problem. As they are paying road taxes as well as income taxes every year for the improvement of roads but road system not much improved. For example, Many countries can not provide the sophisticated transport ways to their citizens. As a result, it increased the number of road accidents. To sum up, I would like to clarify my opinion that the positive aspects outweighs the downsides. I think that I have stated in this easement emphasizes my view point and require no more discussion.
It has been well discussed around the globe that drivers should provide a price in the town street when there is huge rush in the roadway. Like every coin, it
also
has two
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sides
. It will shed light on both
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before
drawing a logical conclusion.

On one side of the issue,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that it brings
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many
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positive
aspects. The
first
one can
be said
that if will they can pay the money to the transport surgeon when they are in the
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traffic
these moneys can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
for the development of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
. By this amount, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can establish
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
light in the city
as well
enlarge the side of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
.
For instance
, Driver will be more beneficial when they are driving on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
by the helping of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
light
also
accident will decrease.

On the flip side, others hold
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
opposite view which cannot
be neglected
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with drivers have not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
ability to give money as for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
in the city.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should take initiative for eradicating this problem. As they are paying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
taxes
as well
as income taxes every year for the improvement of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
system not much
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
.
For example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
countries can not provide the sophisticated transport ways to their citizens.
As a result
, it increased the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
accidents.

To sum up, I would like to clarify my opinion that the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
aspects outweighs the downsides. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that I have stated in this easement emphasizes my view point and require no more discussion.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Drivers should pay a fee in city street when there is a heavy traffic. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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