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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? v.13

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? v. 13
Needless to say, English is a global language and one of the most used speech because of which it is extremely important for everyone to learn it. However, preserving local languages is also crucial to keep a culture alive. Nowadays, due to technology advancement, the world became a global village and for that people want to communicate in a single prose such as English. Presently, most of the international business deals are written and signed in English. To illustrate that, a study conducted by the University of London shows that, 80% of international companies and their businesses are connected using English. Furthermore, these days, majority of multinational corporations require English as a must have language for their employees. Therefore, it is necessary, people should learn English to survive in this world in a better way. Preservation of local languages from the risk of dying out is also important to keep the culture alive for upcoming generations. A vernacular gives modern people a window to the past, and this encourages worldwide understanding of that particular culture. It is believed that without a mother tongue it is extremely tough to know about the traditions of that area such as foods, clothes and many more. Moreover, a dialect also gives a person his/her unique identity. In conclusion, although, English is the highest used language in the world, but local languages are also equally important to keep the civilization alive for future generations. In my view, people should learn both English and their respective local dialect for their all round development and preserving their cultures respectively.
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important
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local
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languages
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also
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keep
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culture
alive.

Nowadays, due to technology advancement, the world became a global village and for that
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people
want to communicate in a single prose such as English.
Presently
, most of the international business deals
are written
and signed in English. To illustrate that, a study conducted by the University of London
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shows
that, 80% of international
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companies
and their businesses
are connected
using English.
Furthermore
, these days, majority of multinational corporations require English as a
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must have
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language
for their employees.
Therefore
, it is necessary,
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people
should learn English to survive in this world in a better way.

Preservation of
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local
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languages
from the
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risk
of dying out is
also
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important
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keep
the
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culture
alive for upcoming generations. A vernacular gives modern
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people
a window to the past, and this encourages worldwide understanding of that particular
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culture
. It
is believed
that without a mother tongue it is
extremely
tough to know about the traditions of that area such as foods, clothes and
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many
more.
Moreover
, a dialect
also
gives a person his/her unique identity.

In conclusion
, although, English is the highest
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used
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language
in the world,
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but
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local
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languages
are
also
equally
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important
to
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keep
the civilization alive for future generations. In my view,
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people
should learn both English and their respective
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local
dialect for their all round development and preserving their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultures
respectively
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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To have another language is to possess a second soul.
Charlemagne

IELTS essay Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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