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dowriters, musician and artists need to be born with special talent or is it more a matter of hard work and dedication. support your opinion with reasons and examples. v.1

dowriters, musician and artists need to be born with special talent or is it more a matter of hard work and dedication. support your opinion with reasons and examples. v. 1
Across the modern world, many individuals prefer to live alone. In my opinion, this is negative development which can lead to isolation, potentially harmful situations, as well as problems that will arise in the future. Firstly, one serious problem which can arise from living alone is its isolation. Before this lifestyle, people would often meet family members or friends, for instance, in the kitchen or hall, whereas now individuals prefer to stay at home alone. As a result, people are starting to waste the majority of their time alone at home in their room without meeting other people. Kind of this isolation is not healthy, moreover, it can lead to depression and other issues. Secondly, live alone at home can gain many dangerous problems. In other words, individuals tend to have a chance to gain risky issues as unexpected situations with health. This is particularly concerning for people who have health problems. Furthermore, as this will happen in a house where people are alone, nobody would not have any way to save their life. Finally, individuals will become lazier in the future. In other words, they will stay at the house and watch TV programs each day. In addiction, this situation is currently critical for many people. They will leave their workplace and also gain a huge number of taxes. These all can lead to the destruction of own life in the future. In conclusion, although it has become more popular for people to spend time alone, it has brought about too many problems for this to be considered a positive trend.
Across the modern world,
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. In my opinion, this is
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development which can lead to isolation,
potentially
harmful situations,
as well
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Firstly
, one serious
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which can arise from living
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alone
is its isolation.
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this lifestyle,
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people
would
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meet
family members or friends,
for instance
, in the kitchen or hall, whereas
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now
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individuals
prefer to stay at home
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alone
.
As a result
,
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people
are starting to waste the majority of their time
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alone
at home in their room without meeting
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other
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people
. Kind of this isolation is not healthy,
moreover
, it can lead to depression and
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issues.

Secondly
,
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at home can gain
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. In
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words,
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individuals
tend to have a chance to gain risky issues as unexpected situations with health. This is
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people
who have health
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problems
.
Furthermore
, as this will happen in a
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where
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people
are
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, nobody would not have any way to save their
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life
.

Finally
,
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will become lazier in the future. In
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and
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TV programs each day. In addiction, this situation is
currently
critical for
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many
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people
. They will
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leave
their workplace and
also
gain a huge number of taxes. These all can lead to the destruction of
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own
life in the future.

In conclusion
, although it has become more popular for
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people
to spend time
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alone
, it has brought about too
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many
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for this to
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trend.
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IELTS essay dowriters, musician and artists need to be born with special talent or is it more a matter of hard work and dedication. support your opinion with reasons and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
262 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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