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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer. v.5

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer. v. 5
Some people argue that skills and creativity would improving by doing an enjoyable activity with a off-spring, others claim that reading would devlop those abilities. I completely disagree with playing with children will imorive the skills and creativity. Firstly, more relaxable activities with children good for mental, activity as well as help to be healty whole day. In other words, kids craziness activities and talking way makes people to forget the tention and stress, due to prevent from heart diseses and the blood presure. It would not help to think to innovative ideas, althuogh reading helps to think in different way in any critical situations. For example, Billgartes, who the world first rishest man, said that, "his innovative ideas and new way of thinks has been improving by reading books and newspapers". Thus, reading is the gateway for facing chellanges, and problem to survive the life. Another point to consider is that, reading books help to modify the language skills, such as vocabluary, pronountaion, and improve grammar. Becasue, books are wrote or translated by authours, who are good in their language. Therefore, reader could get more benfits by reading new type of similarity words and grammars. For Instance, Harry Potter book, which is one of the world popular book, makes people to read curious and help to improve English skills among all over the world. However, reading is most important to all age group. To sum up, using leisure time with kids help to improve the body health, but reading books help to develp the life style and knowledge in all age catagory.
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activity
with
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reading
would
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those abilities. I completely disagree with playing with children will
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the
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and creativity.

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, more
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relaxable
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activities
with children
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good
for mental,
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activity
as well
as
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help
to be
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healty
whole day.
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, kids craziness
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activities
and talking way
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makes
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people
to forget the
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from heart
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and the blood
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presure
. It would not
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to
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to innovative
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,
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althuogh
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reading
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helps
to
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in
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different
way in any critical situations.
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,
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Billgartes
, who the world
first
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rishest
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, said that,
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his innovative
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ideas
and new way of
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thinks
has been improving by
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reading
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books
and newspapers
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.
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,
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is the gateway for facing
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, and problem to survive the life.

Another point to consider is that,
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books
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help
to modify the language
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skills
, such as
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vocabluary
,
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pronountaion
, and
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grammar.
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,
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are
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, who are
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in their language.
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more
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benfits
by
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reading
new type of similarity words and grammars.
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, Harry Potter
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book
, which is one of the world popular
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book
,
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makes
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people
to read curious and
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help
to
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improve
English
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skills
among all over the world.
However
,
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reading
is most
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important
to all age group.

To sum up, using leisure time with kids
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to
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improve
the body health,
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but
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reading
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books
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to
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develp
the life style and knowledge in all age
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catagory
.
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23Mistakes

IELTS essay Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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