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Do you think that parents should be punished if their five-year-old child commits a crime? From what age should children be held responsible for their own behaviours? v.2

Do you think that parents should be punished if their five-year-old child commits a crime? From what age should children be held responsible for their own behaviours? v. 2
Parents' intervention can heavily influence a child's personality and behaviour development. It is an interesting subject of discussion whether parents should be liable for their five-year-old child's lawoffending behaviour or even subject to punishment. In my viewpoint, parents must be held responsible. Unlike adults, children break the law in the absence of either incentive or motive. Their acts are accidental and intuitive, signalling the accumulative effect of the environment where they grow up. Children informative years are particularly susceptible to whom they meet and what they see in their daily lives. For example, their violent acts are very likely to reflect a mixed effect of their repeated exposure to violence. Parents should therefore act as gatekeepers to prevent their children from watching TV and playing video games, thereby negating the influence of media. Once a child uses violence, it reveals that his or her parents have habitually failed to fulfil those duties. For this reason, parents should be accountable for their child's wrongdoing. Another example to show parents' effect on their child's behaviour is that many parents fail to set a positive role model. More often than not, parents have their own behaviour problems (such as using violence in the face of their children). As children have a natural ability to imitate others, their violent or unlawful behaviour is potentially a replica of their parents'. That's why children with fine upbringing normally show their courtesy and professional etiquettes in coping with real-life problems, such as conflicts with others, while those children with poor upbringing are more likely to act violently. People are thus not surprised to see that many young delinquents had unhappy lives and felt discontented with their life circumstances in which they grew up. In general, 18 is the age when an individual starts to be legally responsible for his or her acts. This is an age from which a child is ready to explore life him-or-herself and assumes life responsibilities. For the most part they are allowed to vote, drive, drink and smoke. They have sufficient experience, knowledge and competence for decision making and reaching moral conclusions. In conclusion, parents should be subject to punishment when their children violate the law, in view of their tremendous influence on their child's behaviour. It is their inescapable responsibility until their child comes of age.
Parents' intervention can
heavily
influence a
child's
personality and
behaviour
development. It is an interesting subject of discussion whether
parents
should be liable for their five-year-
old
child's
lawoffending
behaviour
or even subject to punishment. In my viewpoint,
parents
must
be held
responsible.

Unlike adults,
children
break the law in the absence of either incentive or motive. Their
acts
are accidental and intuitive, signalling the accumulative effect of the environment where they grow up.
Children
informative years are
particularly
susceptible to whom they
meet
and what they
see
in their daily
lives
.
For example
, their violent
acts
are
very
likely to reflect a mixed effect of their repeated exposure to violence.
Parents
should
therefore
act
as gatekeepers to
prevent
their
children
from watching TV and playing video games, thereby negating the influence of media. Once a child
uses
violence, it reveals that
his or her
parents
have
habitually
failed to fulfil those duties.
For this reason
,
parents
should be accountable for their
child's
wrongdoing.

Another example to
show
parents' effect on their
child's
behaviour
is that
many
parents
fail to set a
positive
role model. More
often
than not,
parents
have their
own
behaviour
problems (such as using violence in the face of their
children)
. As
children
have a natural ability to imitate others, their violent or unlawful
behaviour
is
potentially
a replica of their parents'. That's why
children
with fine upbringing
normally
show
their courtesy and professional
etiquettes
in coping with real-life problems, such as conflicts with others, while those
children
with poor upbringing are more likely to
act
violently
.
People
are
thus
not surprised to
see
that
many
young delinquents had unhappy
lives
and felt discontented with their life circumstances in which they grew up.

In general
, 18 is the age when an individual
starts
to be
legally
responsible for
his or her
acts
. This is an age from which a child is ready to explore life him-or-herself and assumes life responsibilities.
For the most part
they are
allowed
to vote, drive, drink and smoke. They have sufficient experience, knowledge and competence for
decision making
and reaching moral conclusions.

In conclusion
,
parents
should be subject to punishment when their
children
violate the law, in view of their tremendous influence on their
child's
behaviour
. It is their inescapable responsibility until their child
comes
of age.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you think that parents should be punished if their five-year-old child commits a crime? From what age should children be held responsible for their own behaviours? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
385 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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