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Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v.7

Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v. 7
As the word is moving towards the modern technology and the era of advancement day-by-day and modern technology has occupied every bit of our life as we have everything available on the internet or we can say that now a day things are just on the distance of one click. the internet and modern technology make most of the things easy for us and due to this, a person can save his precious time. We can connect ourselves with the entire world via the internet. Nowadays everything can easily be searched on the internet including books, movies, games, news, weather news etc. so the person does not need to worry about anything because through modern technology like internet and computers they make everything so easy for us. Before the induction of the internet and computers in our daily life, we did not have that many benefits as we are having nowadays so in the past people used to give more importance to the written source of information and mostly people preferred those sources. But as we all know after that much enhancement of modern technology has been done and our life has changed dramatically and it leaves a huge impact on our lifestyle. I personally believe that modern technology like computers and the internet will totally replace the book or written word as a source of information. Because every single thing is easily available on the internet and people mostly go with the trends of modern technology because it gives us a huge amount of benefits and saves our precious time and makes our life easier to live.
As the word is moving towards the
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modern
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technology
and the era of advancement day-by-day and
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modern
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technology
has occupied every bit of our
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life
as we have everything available on the
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internet or
we can say that
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now
a day things are
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just
on the distance of one click.

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the
internet and
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modern
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technology
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make
most of the things easy for us and due to this, a person can save his precious time. We can connect ourselves with the entire world via the internet. Nowadays everything can
easily
be searched
on the internet including books, movies, games, news, weather news etc.
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so
the person does not need to worry about anything
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because
through
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modern
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technology
like internet and computers they
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make
everything
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so
easy for us.

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Before
the induction of the internet and computers in our daily
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life
, we did not have that
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many
benefits as we are having nowadays
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so
in the past
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people
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used
to give more importance to the written source of information and
mostly
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people
preferred those sources.
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But
as we all know after that much enhancement of
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modern
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technology
has
been done
and our
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life
has
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changed
dramatically
and it
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leaves
a huge impact on our lifestyle.

I
personally
believe that
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modern
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technology
like computers and the internet will
totally
replace the book or written word as a source of information.
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Because
every single thing is
easily
available on the internet and
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people
mostly
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go with
the trends of
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modern
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technology
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because
it gives us a huge amount of benefits and saves our precious time and
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makes
our
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life
easier to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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