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Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? Give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience. v.16

Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v. 16
Nowadays, Computers and Internet which is one of the emerging technology is overtaking the existing source of information i-e books or any written based information. People feel ease and more likely use technologies to find information for themselves instead of other sources which is not getting shrinking. We will further discuss it in future. To begin with, It is obvious that technologies like internet and computer, getting dominated over other sources of information. As the use of technology for informative purpose becoming easier for people who wants to change themselves according to the technological world. Additionally, It connects you with the world and always be the fastest way to be linked with the globe. But, this need to be in mind that internet availability could be an issue, too. Still there exist some places, for example in Pakistan, many villages are there where internet or electricity is a serious problem, Secondly you cannot take your computer everywhere as it will be difficult for the one who is moving one place to another. In contrast, Information source that relates to newspaper, book or any other written based media is always used to be friendly, as it attracts people more, comparatively, to others that rely on technology, Still people exist which only believe to study written based information or books because you are more focused, instead of to sit in front of screen, Moreover, you don' t need any specific condition to have them just buy and take them easily wherever you can. To take a case, In rural areas most of the countries don' t have services for internet and sometime electricity as well, or hardly any of them are having computer technology which is one the main aspect people belonging to to those areas try to have information by using books or any published material and that is the reason why there are always attached to the books. Indeed, no doubt that internet technology is one of the demanding tool for grabbing information, However, it is outweighing all other tools like we discussed earlier; paper based knowledge. As, it is known to be sea of knowledge or information these days that include every field whether it is of Engineering area, Doctor or whoever wants it. Despite, information based on paper or books is still known to be one of the easiest and reader-friendly source in terms of convenient, easily accessible. That is why, library is one of the evidence of consider-ability of books.
Nowadays, Computers and Internet which is one of the emerging
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technology
is overtaking the existing
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source
of
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information
i-e
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books
or any written based
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information
.
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People
feel
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ease
and more likely
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use
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technologies
to find
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information
for themselves
instead
of
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other
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sources
which is not getting shrinking. We will
further
discuss it
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in future
.

To
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begin
with, It is obvious that
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technologies
like internet and computer, getting dominated over
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other
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sources
of
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information
. As the
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use
of
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technology
for informative purpose becoming easier for
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people
who
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wants
to
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change
themselves according to the technological world.
Additionally
, It connects you with the world and always be the fastest way to
be linked
with the globe.
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But
, this need to be in mind that internet availability could be an issue, too.
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Still
there exist
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some
places,
for example
in Pakistan,
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many
villages are there where internet or electricity is a serious problem,
Secondly
you cannot take your computer everywhere as it will be difficult for the one who is moving one place to another.

In contrast
,
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Information
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source
that relates to newspaper,
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book
or any
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other
written based media is always
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used
to be friendly, as it attracts
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people
more,
comparatively
, to others that rely on
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technology
,
Still
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people
exist which
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only
believe to study written based
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information
or
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books
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because
you are more focused,
instead
of to sit in front of screen,
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, you
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#039; t need any specific condition to have them
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and take them
easily
wherever you can. To take a case, In rural areas most of the countries
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don&
#039; t have services for internet and sometime electricity
as well
, or hardly any of them are having computer
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technology
which is
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one
the main aspect
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people
belonging
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to to
those areas try to have
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information
by using
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books
or any published material and
that is
the reason why there are always attached to the books.

Indeed
, no doubt that internet
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technology
is one of the demanding tool for grabbing
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information
,
However
, it is outweighing all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
tools like we discussed earlier; paper based knowledge. As, it
is known
to be sea of knowledge or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
these days that include every field whether it is of Engineering area, Doctor or whoever wants it. Despite,
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information
based on paper or
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books
is
still
known to be one of the easiest and reader-friendly
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source
in terms of convenient,
easily
accessible.
That is
why, library is one of the evidence of consider-ability of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
413 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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