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Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v.11

Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v. 11
Modern life has brought new tendencies to our lives and one of them is replacing books and papers by files and e-books. It seems that traditional libraries are changing to new digital ones and people are more interested in downloading books and magazines from the internet as digital files instead of purchasing them from a bookstore. This is a reality that the mentioned trend is raising in each corner of the world and certainly, IT would be the main resource of information in the future but such as any other phenomena, it is necessary to find the reasons of using the internet more than books as a source of information in many societies. Perhaps the most important reason is the price. In other words, when we are purchasing a book or magazine through the internet, we don't pay for papers. By contrast, we would be cost more for papers purchasing from a bookstore. Also, the availability is another reason as we can search the name or the topic of a specific book through some websites such as Google or Yahoo and would find thousands results for that as opposite to spend time and money for finding the book in the market. However, some people worry about the effects of reading through computers on eyes health, I think this is less likely these days when the laptop and computer manufacturers are producing new healthy LEDs. But overall, this trend has helped human to save more energy sources and has had a critical role to prevent from deforestation as the wood has been the basic material for producing papers. I think, therefore, technology has come to existence to help people have a better life and IT has been one of the best aspects of technology which makes our lives speedy, cheaper and easier to obtain information.
Modern life has brought new tendencies to our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
and one of them is replacing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
and papers by files and e-books. It seems that traditional libraries are changing to new digital ones and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are more interested in downloading
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
and magazines from the internet as digital files
instead
of purchasing them from a bookstore.

This is a reality that the mentioned trend is raising in each corner of the world and
certainly
, IT would be the main resource of information in the future
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
such as any other phenomena, it is necessary to find the reasons of using the internet more than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
as a source of information in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
societies.

Perhaps the most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
reason is the price.
In other words
, when we are purchasing a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
or magazine through the internet, we don't pay for papers. By contrast, we would
be cost
more for papers purchasing from a bookstore.
Also
, the availability is another reason as we can search the name or the topic of a specific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
through
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
websites such as Google or Yahoo and would find thousands results for that as opposite to spend time and money for finding the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
in the market.

However
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
worry about the effects of reading through computers on eyes health, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
this is less likely these days when the laptop and computer manufacturers are producing new healthy LEDs.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
overall
, this trend has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
human to save more energy sources and has had a critical role to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
from deforestation as the wood has been the basic material for producing papers.

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
,
therefore
, technology has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to existence to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have a better life and IT has been one of the best aspects of technology which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
speedy, cheaper and easier to obtain information.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v. 11

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
304 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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