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Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v.5

Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v. 5
It is true that information technology has grown rapidly in the past few years, and many people predict that it will develop faster in the future. Some people believe that print out books and articles will be replaced by computer devices in the future. To a certain extent, I would agree that the number of printed books will decrease significantly in the future, but I do believe that hardcopy books will continue to exist in the future. On one hand, it is a fact that with the existence of the computer and the internet technology, people can obtain a lot of information. People would just open the device, connect it to a network and they could search all articles that they need. There are tens of thousands of websites which provide valuable information such as www. national geographic. com or www. discovery. com. Besides that, many news corporations also provide electronic newspapers these days like CNN or BBC, which can be read in the notebook, tab or smartphone. As a result, many people prefer to read the information from the electronic devices rather than to purchase the print out one. On the other hand, it is predicted that print out books, newspapers or magazines will continue to exist in future, though the number will decrease drastically. Firstly, not everyone likes to read an article through the gadget directly, since they think it is uncomfortable. They believe that the radiation of computer screen would cause eyes irritation, and give a negative effect on their eyes' health. Secondly, it is undeniable that the development of internet technology is not equally spread all over the world. The online services would only be available in advance countries and in some major cities of developing and poor countries. As a consequence, people who live in the rural or remote areas will still need the print out version. In conclusion, although it is true that the number of electronic books and news has increased considerably in the recent years, but the existence of the hardcopy version will be irreplaceable. As some people do not feel comfortable in reading an article directly from the computer screen, and others who live in the countryside might not have the access to the technology.
It is true that
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information
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technology
has grown
rapidly
in the past few years, and
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many
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people
predict that it will develop faster in the
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future
.
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Some
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people
believe that
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print
out
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books
and
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articles
will
be replaced
by computer devices in the
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future
. To a certain extent, I would
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agree
that the number of printed
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books
will decrease
significantly
in the
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future
,
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but
I do believe that
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hardcopy
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books
will continue to exist in the future.

On one hand, it is a fact that with the existence of the computer and the internet
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technology
,
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people
can obtain
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a lot of
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information
.
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People
would
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just
open the device, connect it to a
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network and
they could search all
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articles
that they need. There are tens of thousands of websites which provide valuable
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information
such as
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www
.
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national
geographic.
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com
or
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www
.
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discovery
.
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com
.
Besides
that,
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many
news corporations
also
provide electronic newspapers these days like CNN or BBC, which can
be read
in the notebook, tab or smartphone.
As a result
,
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many
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people
prefer to read the
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information
from the electronic devices
rather
than to
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purchase
the
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print
out one.

On the other hand
, it
is predicted
that
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print
out
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books
, newspapers or magazines will continue to exist in
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future
, though the number will decrease
drastically
.
Firstly
, not everyone likes to read an
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article
through the gadget
directly
, since they
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think
it is uncomfortable. They believe that the radiation of computer screen would cause eyes irritation, and give a
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negative
effect on their eyes' health.
Secondly
, it is undeniable that the development of internet
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technology
is not
equally
spread all over the world. The online services would
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only
be available in advance countries and in
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some
major cities of developing and poor countries. As a consequence,
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people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in the rural or remote areas will
still
need the
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print
out version.

In conclusion
, although it is true that the number of electronic
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books
and news has increased
considerably
in the recent years,
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but
the existence of the
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hardcopy
version will be irreplaceable. As
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some
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people
do not feel comfortable in reading an
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article
directly
from the computer screen,
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and others
who
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live
in the countryside might not have the access to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
374 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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