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Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v.3

Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v. 3
It is certainly true that these days, as technology advances, we are definitely drifting further towards the internet for our research needs. But I think that computer technology will never ever be a replacement of books and written information because they are the main tools used for our reference purposes and education. It is true that as technology advances and the net becomes more and more efficient; it is gaining a reputation for being the first and sometimes the only source to go when we need to search a subject. However, as the web has a large base of information, locating exactly what we need is sometimes quite a trying task. In some instances, we find that it probably would have been easier to have gone to the library and used a book. Another problem we are faced with while searching online is whether or not the information is correct. We sometimes can be deceived by information on a website and be unaware that what we are writing down is incorrect. So books will never ever be replaced even if there are lots of people using the cyberspace. This is due to the fact that books are the main tool of education and are commonly used for our leisure time. In fact, books have been with us for many thousands of years and usually used for our enjoyment purposes. For instance, reading stories in books is an ancient pastime, and although the variety of activities can undertake in our spare time has increased dramatically over the years, it is still quite common to read books. Of course, they are not only used for our pastimes, but for our studies too. They play a major part in our primary, secondary and in tertiary education. In conclusion, I think that as computer age takes over, we may use books less, especially for information purposes. However, books as we know them will not disappear; they will never ever be replaced by the information in the screen because they are used in our leisure time and the main tool for our education.
It is
certainly
true that these days, as technology advances, we are definitely drifting
further
towards the internet for our research needs.
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But
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that computer technology will never ever be a replacement of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
and written
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
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because
they are the main tools
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for our reference purposes and education.

It is true that as technology advances and the net becomes more and more efficient; it is gaining a reputation for being the
first
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
source to go when we need to search a subject.
However
, as the web has a large base of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
, locating exactly what we need is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
quite a trying task. In
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
instances, we find that it
probably
would have been easier to have gone to the library and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
. Another problem we
are faced
with while searching online is
Consider shortening this phrase to just "whether". It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
whether or not
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
is correct. We
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
can
be deceived
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
on a website and be unaware that what we are writing down is incorrect.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
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books
will never ever
be replaced
even if there are lots of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
using the cyberspace.
This is due to the fact that
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books
are the main tool of education and are
commonly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for our leisure time. In fact,
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books
have been with us for
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many
thousands of years and
usually
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for our enjoyment purposes.
For instance
, reading stories in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
is an ancient pastime, and although the variety of activities can undertake in our spare time has increased
dramatically
over the years, it is
still
quite common to read
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
.
Of course
, they are not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for our pastimes,
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but
for our studies too. They play a major part in our primary, secondary and in tertiary education.

In conclusion
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that as computer age takes over, we may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
less,
especially
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
purposes.
However
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
as we know them will not disappear; they will never ever
be replaced
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
in the screen
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in our leisure time and the main tool for our education.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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