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Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v.15

Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v. 15
“Books are the best teachers”. This line still holds the truth in current era but with some changes in the way we access the books. With the advancement of technology, internet and computers have become the main source of information and have put in front a very important question. Whether computer and the internet will totally replace books as the form of information? From my point of view, it already has replaced books thanks to the benefits it poses over the traditional hand written text. Computers in the form of tablet and phones are more portable and carry loads of information which on paper requires humungous size. Data on computers also gets updated with the help of internet which in the case of books can be done only by purchasing new ones. Live instances of this can be found around easily. To illustrate, in schools more emphasis now being put on teaching via computer and internet which is more interactive for students and also does not require them to carry heavy books and notes. Also devices like kindle which is an e-book reader helps people to read for long hours without straining eyes and to carry unlimited number of books at the same point of time which in the case of traditional textbooks required behemoth effort. Again, all the renowned publishers all around the world now release the soft copy of their books, magazines and other publications that show the dominance of e-version of print media. The day is not far when people will carry technological device instead of carrying a large number of books with them. To conclude, technology has already replaced traditional books and there is nothing wrong in this as technology is an ever changing concept which meant to help us.
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“Books
are the best teachers”. This line
still
holds the truth in
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current
era
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some
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changes
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books
. With the advancement of technology, internet and computers have become the main source of information and have put in front a
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very
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important
question. Whether computer and the internet will
totally
replace
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books
as the form of information?

From my point of view, it already has replaced
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books
thanks to the benefits it poses over the traditional
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hand written
text. Computers in the form of tablet and phones are more portable and
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carry
loads of information which on paper requires humungous size. Data on computers
also
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gets
updated with the
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help
of internet which in the case of
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books
can
be done
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only
by purchasing new ones.

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Live
instances of this can
be found
around
easily
. To illustrate, in schools more emphasis
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now
being put
on teaching via computer and internet which is more interactive for students and
also
does not require them to
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carry
heavy
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books
and notes.
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Also
devices like kindle which is an e-book reader
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helps
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people
to read for long hours without straining eyes and to
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carry
unlimited number of
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books
at the same point of time which in the case of traditional textbooks required behemoth effort.

Again, all the renowned publishers all around the world
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now
release the soft copy of their
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books
, magazines and other publications that
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show
the dominance of e-version of print media. The day is not far when
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people
will
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carry
technological device
instead
of carrying
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books
with them.

To conclude
, technology has already replaced traditional
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books
and there is nothing
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wrong
in this as technology is an
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ever changing
concept which meant to
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help
us.
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14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information? v. 15

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
294 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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