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Do you think having a pet is a good idea or not? v.1

Do you think having a pet is a good idea or not? v. 1
Pets are considered as  human beings friends and have been playing an important role in their owners' daily lives since the beginning. Whether owning a pet is the right decision or not, I personally believe,  depends on individual's personal conditions. The essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a pet. To begin with, owning a suitable and lovely pet will be a great decision to its owner. Firstly, it not only provides emotional comfort to its owner but also helps its owner stay healthy physically and mentally. Pets are excellent companions for the elderly who live alone.  Secondly, having pets for children will help them to nurture positive personal characters, such as responsibility, sympathy,  and so on. Last but not the least, pets also protect owners and their properties. Dogs for the blind not only will lead their owners' ways, but also protect them from traffic accidents. However, keeping a pet is expensive and will bring financial burden to owners because owners will spend money on their pets' food, medical cover and insurance.  Sometime, pets will cause allergic reactions to their owners or carry parasites and transmit them to their owners as well. For example, dog fur is a trigger for some peoples' asthma. In conclusion, I would say that petting an animal is not merely advantageous for people for above reasons but rather is a noble method to save animals by providing them shelters and food. However, sometimes they cause threats to the owner by causing physical attacks, triggering allergic diseases and transmitting parasites and it is expensive to keep them as well. Therefore,  I personally believe that whether owning a pet benefit owners or not will depend on owners' various situations.
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human beings friends and have been playing an
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important
role in their owners' daily
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since the beginning. Whether owning a pet is the right decision or not, I
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depends on individual's personal conditions. The essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a pet.

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with, owning a suitable and lovely pet will be a great decision to its
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owner
.
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only
provides emotional comfort to its
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owner
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but
also
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helps
its
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owner
stay healthy
physically
and mentally.
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Pets
are excellent companions for the elderly who
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live
alone.  
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, having
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pets
for children will
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help
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positive
personal characters, such as responsibility, sympathy,
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and
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on. Last
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not the least,
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also
protect
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owners
and their properties. Dogs for the blind not
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only
will lead their owners' ways,
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also
protect them from traffic accidents.

However
, keeping a pet is expensive and will bring financial burden to
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owners
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because
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owners
will spend money on their pets' food, medical cover and insurance.  Sometime,
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pets
will cause allergic reactions to their
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owners
or carry parasites and transmit them to their
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owners
as well
.
For example
, dog fur is a trigger for
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some
peoples' asthma.

In conclusion
, I would say that petting an animal is not
merely
 advantageous for
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people
for above reasons
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but
rather
 is a noble method to save animals by providing them shelters and food.
However
,
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sometimes
they cause threats to the owner by causing physical attacks, triggering allergic diseases and transmitting parasites and it is expensive to
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keep
them
as well
.
Therefore
,
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I
personally
believe that whether owning a pet benefit
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owners
or not will depend on owners' various situations.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you think having a pet is a good idea or not? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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