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Some people believe that air travel should be restricted as it causes serious pollution and uses up world’s fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people believe that air travel should be restricted as it causes serious pollution and uses up world’s fuel resources. v. 1
Nowadays, Aviation sector is getting more and more developing around the world. Due to having hazardous effects on environment few masses are in favour of posing restrictions on the airways. While limiting the frequency of flights can be a resolution to alleviate the fuel consumption and pollution problems, I also believe that it's complete restriction can be disastrous for the nation's economy. On the one hand, aviation sector provides benefits to the natives of any country. Firstly airways provide comfortable, efficient, quick service and is preferred by opulent business executives for travelling to various destinations and also it is suitable for transporting the goods over long distances especially for perishable goods. Secondly, it gives easy access as it does not face any physical barrier and follow shortest and direct routes and also it is must for distant countries because it is impossible to travel through road to such far away destinations with no other alternative other than planes. Finally, thanks to the aviation industry, intercultural exchanges are happening across the globe with the help of international tourism by virtue of which it has become the backbone of many economies and so many countries are earning from tourism which in turn helps to bring economic and cultural globalization. On the other hand, I also assert that aviation industry causes many problems. Firstly, massive air traffic deteriorates fuel shortage with high consumption of energy which is basically the exploitation of world’s reserve fuel and it has been proved by a researchers that energy consumed by the airplane is far more than a vehicle for the same distance. Moreover, in some developing countries there is a backwardness in aviation technology which do not comply with international minimum emission standard and as a result vast amounts of excessive exhaust emissions are emitted that cause severe air pollution. Lastly, it is also considered as the source of noise pollution. However, it is impossible to measure exactly the actual impact but is has the ability to increase anxiety and levels of disturbance especially among people living in vicinity of airport or around flight paths In conclusion, it can be reiterated that although aviation industry poses threat to the environment but I cannot ignore the whole lot of benefits which it brings to natives of every nation.
Nowadays,
Aviation
sector is getting more and more developing around the world. Due to having hazardous effects on environment few masses are in
favour
of posing restrictions on the airways. While limiting the frequency of flights can be a resolution to alleviate the fuel consumption and pollution problems, I
also
believe that it's complete restriction can be disastrous for the nation's economy.

On the one hand,
aviation
sector provides benefits to the natives of any
country
.
Firstly
airways provide comfortable, efficient, quick service and
is preferred
by opulent business executives for travelling to various destinations and
also
it is suitable for transporting the
goods
over long distances
especially
for perishable
goods
.
Secondly
, it gives easy access as it does not face any physical barrier and follow shortest and direct routes and
also
it is
must
for distant
countries
because
it is impossible to travel through road to such far away destinations with no other alternative other than
planes
.
Finally
, thanks to the
aviation
industry, intercultural exchanges are happening across the globe with the
help
of international tourism by virtue of which it has become the backbone of
many
economies and
so
many
countries
are earning from tourism which in turn
helps
to bring economic and cultural globalization.

On the other hand
, I
also
assert that
aviation
industry causes
many
problems.
Firstly
, massive air traffic deteriorates fuel shortage with high consumption of energy which is
basically
the exploitation of world’s reserve fuel and it has
been proved
by
a researchers
that energy consumed by the airplane is far more than a vehicle for the same distance.
Moreover
, in
some
developing
countries
there is a backwardness in
aviation
technology which do not comply with international minimum emission standard and
as a result
vast amounts of excessive exhaust emissions
are emitted
that cause severe air pollution.
Lastly
, it is
also
considered as the source of noise pollution.
However
, it is impossible to measure exactly the actual impact
but
is has the ability to increase anxiety and levels of disturbance
especially
among
people
living in vicinity of airport or around flight paths

In conclusion
, it can
be reiterated
that although
aviation
industry poses threat to the environment
but
I cannot
ignore
the
whole lot
of benefits which it brings to natives of every nation.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that air travel should be restricted as it causes serious pollution and uses up world’s fuel resources. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
380 words
6
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