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Do you think design of buildings have positive or negative impact? Which way it can effect on work and live? ” v.1

Do you think design of buildings have positive or negative impact? Which way it can effect on work and live? ” v. 1
Nowadays, a lot of money is being spent on buildings around the world. Some say that design can have a positive impact on our lives and I agree with this. It can create a positive environment that will in turn help people to be happy and content. It is undoubtedly true that good architecture always has an impact on the poeple. Working or staying is such an environment creates an order and a sense of discipline. Besides, it creates a positive energy and people will be more motivated and productive on whatever they are doing. For instance, ancient Indians had a scientific knowledge on energy and they used to build houses based on what they called "Vaastu". Although science has not been able to proove this, they still follow this as a tradition and make sure the construction will create a positive impact on people. A good and structured building has effects on people around it. A properly arranged office cabins will motivate people and make them happy, which in turn will increase the productivity of the company. A proper lighting and a comfortable chair will beautiful surrounding will encourage every employee and that is the reason why many big firms hire interiors architects to design their office space. Also, a neatly arranged home creates a happy environment and people will find more time to spent at home. This will increase the bonding between families and will have a great impact on themselves as well as the society. For example, a kid from a happy family will succeed in whatever they do compared to ne from a dysfunctional one. To conclude, the place where we work or live do affect our lives and make it more meaningful. A properly designed space has a positive impact on everyone surrounding and is definitely advantageous in all aspects.
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say that design can have a
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positive
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impact
on our
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lives
and I
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agree
with this. It can
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create
a
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positive
environment that will in turn
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help
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people
to be
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happy
and content.

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undoubtedly
true that
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good
architecture always has an
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impact
on the
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poeple
. Working or staying is such an environment
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creates
an order and a sense of discipline.
Besides
, it
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creates
a
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positive
energy and
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people
will be more motivated and productive on whatever they are doing.
For instance
, ancient Indians had
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on
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energy and
they
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used
to build
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houses
based on what they called
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Vaastu
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. Although science has not been able to
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proove
this, they
still
follow this as a tradition and
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make
sure the construction will
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create
a
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positive
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impact
on
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people
.

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good
and structured building has effects on
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people
around it. A
properly
arranged office cabins will motivate
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people
and
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make
them
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happy
, which in turn will increase the productivity of the
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company
.
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A
proper lighting and a comfortable chair will
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beautiful
surrounding will encourage every employee and
that is
the reason why
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many
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big
firms hire interiors architects to design their office space.
Also
, a
neatly
arranged home
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creates
a
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happy
environment and
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people
will find more time to spent at home. This will increase the bonding between families and will have a great
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impact
on themselves
as well
as the society.
For example
, a kid from a
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happy
family will succeed in whatever they do compared to
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ne
from a dysfunctional one.

To conclude
, the place where we work or
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live
do affect our
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lives
and
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make
it more meaningful. A
properly
designed space has a
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positive
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impact
on everyone surrounding and is definitely advantageous in all aspects.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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Victor Hugo

IELTS essay Do you think design of buildings have positive or negative impact? Which way it can effect on work and live? ” v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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