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Do you think consumers should avoid over packed products or it is the responsibility of product producers to avoid extra packaging of products? v.2

Do you think consumers should avoid over packed products or it is the responsibility of product producers to avoid extra packaging of products? v. 2
This is a true fact to consider that over packaging has become a trend of the modern competitive market. Considering this, there are some analysts who hold an opinion that consumers should avoid over packed products while others consider consumers should not avoid over packed products. This essay will give assertion on both sides of the contention before deducing a reasonable conclusion. There are reasonable arguments in favour of over packaging from the manufacturer. They try to make products as lucrative looking as possible. Consumers have a number of alternative options in the market but some of them concern style or looks of packaging while deciding to buy a product. Attractive packaging could be a significant factor for selling more.   It is generally seen that product producers try to attract their customers in many ways by over packaging. For example, in the case of some biscuit packs, we can see that the biscuits are placed in the small plastic tray and covered with multiple layers of packets. In terms of keeping these sorts of products intact and fresh, it is sometimes necessary to use over packing. In these cases, the manufacturer would show reasons that they are over packing products for the sake of customers’ benefit. From this regards, it seems logical that the customer should make an informed decision whether or not to buy products that use over packing. In spite of views discussed above regarding of over packaging, there are some groups who are in favour of avoiding over packed products and say that the manufacturers are deceiving customers by over packing their products. The cost of packaging and their detrimental effects on our environment could be substantial reasons behind of the opponents’ viewpoint.   All the packaging costs are directly being added to the consumers and they have to spend more than the value of products. A few real products are often presented in a large container and packet and the customers are being deceived by the packet sized. Moreover, the manufacturers often use non-disposable wrappers and packets which add bad effects to the environmental. In the end, undoubtedly, extra packaging of products has a detrimental effect on the society; however, as far as I am concern consumers should avoid over-packaging products to solve the negative effects it possessed to them and to the environment. If customers start avoiding such unnecessary over packing of products, manufacturers would be bound to change the way they are doing the packing nowadays.
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has become a trend of the modern competitive market. Considering this, there are
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some
analysts who hold an opinion that
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consumers
should avoid
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over
packed
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products
while others consider
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consumers
should not avoid
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over
packed
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products
. This essay will give assertion on both sides of the contention
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before
deducing a reasonable conclusion.

There are reasonable arguments in
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favour
of
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over
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packaging
from the
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manufacturer
. They try to
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make
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products
as lucrative looking as possible.
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Consumers
have a number of alternative options in the market
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but
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some
of them concern style or looks of
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packaging
while deciding to
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buy
a
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product
. Attractive
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packaging
could be a significant factor for selling more.
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generally
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seen
that
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product
producers try to attract their
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customers
in
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ways by
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over
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.
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, in the case of
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some
biscuit packs, we can
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that the biscuits
are placed
in the
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small
plastic tray and covered with multiple layers of
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packets
. In terms of keeping these sorts of
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products
intact and fresh, it is
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sometimes
necessary to
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use
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over
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. In these cases, the
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manufacturer
would
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show
reasons that they are
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over
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packing
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products
for the sake of
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customers’
benefit. From
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this
regards, it seems logical that the
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customer
should
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make
an informed decision
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whether or not
to
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products
that
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use
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over
packing.

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views discussed above regarding of
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packaging
, there are
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some
groups who are in
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favour
of avoiding
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over
packed
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products
and say that the
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manufacturers
are deceiving
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customers
by
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over
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packing
their
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. The cost of
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and their detrimental effects on our environment could be substantial reasons behind of the opponents’ viewpoint.
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All the
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packaging
costs are
directly
being
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added
to the
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consumers and
they
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have to
spend more than the value of
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products
. A few real
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products
are
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often
presented in a large container and
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packet
and the
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customers
are
being deceived
by the
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packet
sized.
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, the
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manufacturers
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use
non-disposable wrappers and
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which
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add
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bad
effects to the environmental.

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end
,
undoubtedly
, extra
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of
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has a detrimental
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effect
on the society;
however
, as far as I am concern
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consumers
should avoid over-packaging
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products
to solve the
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negative
effects it possessed to them and to the environment. If
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customers
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start
avoiding such unnecessary
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over
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of
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products
,
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would
be bound
to
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change
the way they are doing the
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packing
nowadays.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
62Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you think consumers should avoid over packed products or it is the responsibility of product producers to avoid extra packaging of products? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
413 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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