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Do you think consumers should avoid over packed products or it is the responsibility of product producers to avoid extra packaging of products? v.1

Do you think consumers should avoid over packed products or it is the responsibility of product producers to avoid extra packaging of products? v. 1
Over-packaging of products has become a trend in today's competitive world. Producers are trying to attract consumers with an attractive packaging of their products, not bothered about its negative impact not only on our environment but the users as well. It should be the responsibility of the producers to limit the wastage of the resources in the form of unnecessary packaging. The cost of over packaging is actually added to the product sold. In fact, at times it is seen the packing cost and durability is more that the product itself. The type of packaging found in pharmaceutical industries can be taken as an example here. Pills and tablets are found to be packed in much bigger and colourful strips than needed. Does this increase the sale of medicine? No. Such packaging is of no concern to the consumers. But, the cost of medicine would have definitely been lesser if sold in a simple outlook. Further, the material used is mostly non-disposable which adds to the environmental pollution to a great extent. Snacks and other food items packaged in eye-catchy shimmering coloured packets are consumed on a large scale by everybody. These packets are really difficult to dispose of as they emit poisonous gas if burnt and if not can be seen to contaminate water somewhere. Producers should realise the importance of using materials like paper and stick to simple packaging. Packaging as seen increases the cost of the product and also makes our environment unhealthy. So, this packaging boom should be checked on a serious note by the producers. Moreover, the producers should be restricted to predefined rules and parameters set by the government. It is also recommended that an awareness among the users that quality of the product is important rather than the attractive packaging.
Over-packaging of
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products
has become a trend in
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today
's competitive world.
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Producers
are trying to attract consumers with an attractive
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packaging
of their
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products
, not bothered about its
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negative
impact not
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only
on our environment
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but
the users
as well
. It should be the responsibility of the
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producers
to limit the wastage of the resources in the form of unnecessary packaging.

The
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cost
of over
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packaging
is actually
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added
to the
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product
sold. In fact, at times it is
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seen
the packing
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cost
and durability is more that the
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product
itself. The type of
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packaging
found in pharmaceutical industries can
be taken
as an example here. Pills and tablets
are found
to
be packed
in much bigger and
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colourful
strips than needed. Does this increase the sale of medicine? No. Such
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packaging
is of no concern to the consumers.
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But
, the
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cost
of medicine would have definitely been lesser if sold in a simple outlook.

Further
, the material
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used
is
mostly
non-disposable which
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adds
to the environmental pollution to a great extent. Snacks and other food items packaged in eye-catchy shimmering
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coloured
packets
are consumed
on a large scale by everybody. These packets are
really
difficult to dispose of as they emit poisonous gas if burnt and if not can be
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seen
to contaminate water somewhere.
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Producers
should
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realise
the importance of using materials like paper and stick to simple packaging.

Packaging as
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seen
increases the
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cost
of the
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product
and
also
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makes
our environment unhealthy.
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So
, this
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packaging
boom should be
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checked
on a serious note by the
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producers
.
Moreover
, the
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producers
should
be restricted
to predefined
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rules
and parameters set by the
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government
. It is
also
recommended that an awareness among the users that quality of the
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product
is
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important
rather
than the attractive
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packaging
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you think consumers should avoid over packed products or it is the responsibility of product producers to avoid extra packaging of products? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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