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Do you prefer to study alone or with other students in a group. Support your opinion with reasons and examples. v.1

Do you prefer to study alone or with other students in a group. Support your opinion with reasons and examples. v. 1
Some people argued that taking part in individual sports such as swimming or tennis, will gain more benefit than playing in team sports. I personally more support for sports which played in a team. On the one hand, there are various reasons why some people think individual sports have more advantages. First, since playing alone is able to develop independence skill. In fact, people who participate in individual sports, like swimming or tennis, have not received any support from other teammates. So, they need to make every possible effort to achieve their goal by themselves. Second, single players can also develop the ability in analysing and solving an expected problems in a short time, since nobody behind their back to support instantly during the game. On the other hand, I would advocate that participating in group sports, are far more beneficial. Playing a sport like football, which require a team spirit of each member, so players not only can increase their social skills, such as communication or interaction, but also can level up their networking from interacting among people. Moreover, Multiplay sports can also help people increase effectively their responsibility spirit, as they need to focus totally on the play match. Team sports also teach people about leadership which is one of the most important skills in today’s world. In conclusion, although solo sports are able to help increase personal skills intensively, I believe that engaging in team sports are more likely to acquire life skills which are not only important to the individual but also crucial to the community.
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argued that taking part in
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individual
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such as swimming or tennis, will gain more benefit than playing in
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. I
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which played in a team.

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think
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have more advantages.
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, since playing alone is able to develop independence
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skill
. In fact,
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who participate in
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individual
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, like swimming or tennis, have not received any support from other teammates.
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every possible effort to achieve their goal by themselves. Second, single players can
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develop the ability in
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analysing
and solving an
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in a short time, since nobody behind their back to support
instantly
during the game.

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, I would advocate that participating in group
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, are far more beneficial. Playing a
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like football, which require a
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spirit of each member,
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players not
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can increase their social
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, such as communication or interaction,
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also
can level up their networking from interacting among
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.
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increase
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their responsibility spirit, as they need to focus
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on the play match.
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also
teach
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about leadership which is one of the most
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important
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skills
in
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today
’s world.

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, although solo
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are able to
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increase personal
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intensively
, I believe that engaging in
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are more likely to acquire life
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which are not
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to the
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also
crucial to the community.
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IELTS essay Do you prefer to study alone or with other students in a group. Support your opinion with reasons and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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