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Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a group of students. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a group of students. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Different students have different attitude towards physical education lessons - some of them enjoy jogging, playing football and competing with each other, some of them do not. The fact remains fact that in most of educational institutions PE courses are obligatory for all learners - regardless of their physical abilities and schoolwork. In this essay the level of necessity for physical education program will be discussed. First and foremost, PE programs are developed without taking into account particular student’s physical characteristics - such as body type, weight, lung capacity and etc. As a result, the self-esteem of those who complete tasks relatively worse than others may significantly lower. For example, when a given task is to run 100 meters in 15 seconds, those who suffer from overweight might not succeed as the assignment was not designed for their physique, and, therefore, feel physically handicapped. Thus, national standards for physical education classes should vary in accordance with physical characteristics and abilities of students. Secondly, the majority of high school students are usually overloaded with assignments, homework, projects and exam preparation which leads to anxiety and mental breakdowns. Most learners would agree that if even three hours per week allotted to PE classes would be spared or redistributed for others subjects (such as Math, Physics or Chemistry), which are actually crucial for their future careers, would help to complete most of the the assignments on time. However, for those who have free time and care about being physically active physical education classes should still be available. To draw a conclusion, PE programs need to be reconsidered by taking into account physical features in order to be suitable for all students. In addition, physical education lessons should be optional as it would allow students to unload from their schoolwork.
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abilities and schoolwork. In this essay the level of necessity for
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physical
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program will
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First
and foremost, PE programs
are developed
without taking into account particular
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student’s
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physical
characteristics
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such as body type, weight, lung capacity
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As a result
, the self-esteem of those who complete tasks
relatively
worse than others may
significantly
lower.
For example
, when a
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task is to run 100 meters in 15 seconds, those who suffer from overweight might not succeed as the assignment was not designed for their physique, and,
therefore
, feel
physically
handicapped.
Thus
, national standards for
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physical
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education
classes should vary in accordance with
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physical
characteristics and abilities of students.

Secondly
, the majority of high school
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students
are
usually
overloaded with assignments, homework, projects and exam preparation which leads to anxiety and mental breakdowns. Most learners would
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agree
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be spared
or redistributed for others subjects (such as Math, Physics or Chemistry), which are actually crucial for their future careers, would
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help
to complete most of
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assignments on time.
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physically
active
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physical
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education
classes should
still
be available.

To draw a conclusion, PE programs need to
be reconsidered
by taking into account
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physical
features in order to be suitable for all
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students
.
In addition
,
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physical
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education
lessons should be optional as it would
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allow
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students
to unload from their schoolwork.
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IELTS essay Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a group of students. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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