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Do you prefer to spend your vacation in the city or in the countryside? Why? Please explain in detail. v.1

Do you prefer to spend your vacation in the city or in the countryside? Why? Please explain in detail. v. 1
Public transport has become a basic necessity in small as well as big cities. Many people believe that the governments should work on improving transport mediums and invest in rapid transport vehicles. In my opinion, I think every person wants affordable and comfortable journey so regulators must spend some budget amount to develop transport facilities. This essay will discuss, why some people think it is advantageous, and others not find it beneficial. To start with, if faster public transport available, then people might prefer it rather than using their own vehicle which will eventually lead to less traffic in the city. To state an example, after Delhi metro inception in city, majority of Delhi's citizens have stopped using personal cars to travel instead now they use metro to reach their destination. Additionally, if less traffic is there in any city then pollution will be reduced. For example, significant improvement was observed in air quality when Delhi authorities had applied odd-even rule which was to ban even numbers car on even date and odd number cars on odd dates. Furthermore, rapid transport will reduce travel time, thus people's travelling to office will be hassle free. Nevertheless, there are many compelling reasons why some people think that transport facility should not be given top priority by the authorities. Such people believe that other basic amenities like education, environment and medical should be the higher priority as they will affect the masses. And if better medical facilities are provided in government hospitals then people will not have to splurge their money in private hospitals. Similarly, education is one such area which should not be ignored. In conclusion, the government should keep investing in this area to make transportation easily available and affordable while taking care of other departments too.
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has become a basic necessity in
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small
as well
as
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big
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cities
.
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people
believe that the
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governments
should work on improving
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transport
mediums and invest in rapid
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transport
vehicles. In my opinion, I
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think
every person wants affordable and comfortable journey
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so
regulators
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must
spend
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budget amount to develop
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transport
facilities. This essay will discuss, why
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some
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people
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think
it is advantageous,
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and others
not find it beneficial.

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with, if faster public
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available, then
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people
might prefer it
rather
than using their
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own
vehicle which will
eventually
lead to less traffic in the city. To state an example, after Delhi metro inception in city,
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majority of
Delhi's citizens have
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stopped
using personal cars to travel
instead
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now
they
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use
metro to reach their destination.
Additionally
, if less traffic is there in any city then pollution will be
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reduced
.
For example
, significant improvement
was observed
in air quality when Delhi authorities had applied odd-even
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rule
which was to ban even numbers car on even date and odd number cars on odd dates.
Furthermore
, rapid
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transport
will
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reduce
travel time,
thus
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people
's travelling to office will be hassle free.

Nevertheless
, there are
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many
compelling reasons why
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some
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people
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think
that
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transport
facility should not be
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given
top priority by the authorities. Such
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people
believe that other basic amenities like education, environment and medical should be the higher priority as they will affect the masses. And if better medical facilities
are provided
in
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government
hospitals then
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people
will not
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have to
splurge their money in private hospitals.
Similarly
, education is one such area which should not be
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ignored
.

In conclusion
, the
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government
should
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keep
investing in this area to
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make
transportation
easily
available and affordable while taking care of other departments too.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you prefer to spend your vacation in the city or in the countryside? Why? Please explain in detail. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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