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Do you agree or disagreewith the following statement? Taking a lot of time to make an importantdecision is often considered as a badquality for a person. However, some peoplethink that it is a good quality for a person. v.1

Taking a lot of time to make an importantdecision is often considered as a badquality for a person. However, some peoplethink that it is a good quality for a person. v. 1
The high rate of literacy, a better trade and a less rate of death due to chronic and contagious diseases are the prominent factors which determine a country's growth. Some people argue that, there should be a helping hand from the developed countries to the underdeveloped countries for accelerating the growth of the nation. I am supporting this argument and the following essay state points to support my view. Firstly, there needs a huge budget to build an infrastructure for the education and to implement processes to eradiate the major diseases. The countries which are in the developing stage, requires financial support from the richer countries. Moreover, without a helping hand, it would be difficult to achieve this. For example, India has expressed interest and helped the China to improve the literacy rate by contributing an amount to build five medical colleges. As a result, now China is aware about the illness and started taking precautions. Secondly, each country has their own main areas in the trade. Helping them to improve their business by opening way to export the materials will actually help the other countries and they get the best quality of materials. For example, Kerala is famous for the cultivation of species and by understanding this, US has shared interests to develop a better sea port in Kerala to export the best quality species such as pepper, cardamom. In turn, helped Kerala to expand their business and US to get better products. In conclusion, it is always better to show readiness to support the developer or the poor countries to solve the health related issues and to develop better business.
The high rate of literacy, a
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trade and a less rate of death due to chronic and contagious diseases are the prominent factors which determine a country's growth.
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Some
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people
argue that, there should be a helping hand from the developed
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countries
to the underdeveloped
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countries
for accelerating the growth of the nation. I am supporting this argument and the following essay state points to support my view.

Firstly
, there needs a huge budget to build an infrastructure for the education and to implement processes to
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eradiate
the major diseases. The
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countries
which are in the developing stage, requires financial support from the richer
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countries
.
Moreover
, without a helping hand, it would be difficult to achieve this.
For example
, India has expressed interest and
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helped
the China to
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improve
the literacy rate by contributing an amount to build five medical colleges.
As a result
,
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now
China is aware about the illness and
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started
taking precautions.

Secondly
, each
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country
has their
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own
main areas in the trade. Helping them to
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improve
their business by opening way to export the materials will actually
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help
the other
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countries and
they
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get
the best quality of materials.
For example
, Kerala is
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famous
for the cultivation of species and by understanding this, US has shared interests to develop a
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better
sea port in Kerala to export the best quality species such as pepper, cardamom. In turn,
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helped
Kerala to expand their business and US to
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get
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better
products.

In conclusion
, it is always
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better
to
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show
readiness to support the developer or the poor
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countries
to solve the health related issues and to develop
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better
business.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Taking a lot of time to make an importantdecision is often considered as a badquality for a person. However, some peoplethink that it is a good quality for a person. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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