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Do you prefer finding information by reading books or searching the internet? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v.2

Do you prefer finding information by reading books or searching the internet? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 2
There is no doubt that these days a lot of people are watching films to enjoy their time, especially with their kids, however, the question: Is violence in films nowadays affecting us socially and emotionally? Is considered a controversial issue, while I tend to believe that filmmakers have to respect the society and use their films to solve our problems instead of making them violence. On one side of the argument, there are people who argue that we should have violence films in order to get excited and have fun. Furthermore, they argue that not everyone has to watch these films and it depends on the individual's personality and preference. Also, they believe that watching these films has to be monitored not only by guardians and parents, but also by cinema's companies, so tickets should not be sold to any person below 18 years old. For example, cinemas in Kuwait are following strict rules regarding age limits, while I guess this should be more strict. On the other hand, it is also possible to consider it with the opposing case. These films should not be produced or shown in the cinemas and there has to be penalties on those who act them as they do not have any valuable meanings or aims. Moreover, various social problems become common in the society because of these movies and the lack of restrictions on the ages watching them such as, suicide among teenagers, kids scratching themselves in order to copy what they have seen in a film. In conclusion, countries have to apply harsh rules on film makers and force them to make films that will benefit the society and the coming generations.
There is no doubt that these days
a lot of
people
are watching films to enjoy their time,
especially
with their kids,
however
, the question: Is violence in films nowadays affecting us
socially
and
emotionally
?
Is considered
a controversial issue, while I tend to believe that filmmakers
have to
respect the society and
use
their films to solve our problems
instead
of making them violence.

On one side of the argument, there are
people
who argue that we should have violence films in order to
get
excited and have fun.
Furthermore
, they argue that not everyone
has to
watch
these films and it depends on the individual's personality and preference.
Also
, they believe that watching these films
has to
be monitored
not
only
by guardians and parents,
but
also
by cinema's
companies
,
so
tickets should not
be sold
to any person below 18 years
old
.
For example
, cinemas in Kuwait are following strict
rules
regarding age limits, while I guess this should be more strict.

On the other hand
, it is
also
possible to consider it with the opposing case. These films should not
be produced
or shown in the cinemas and there
has to
be penalties on those who act them as they do not have any valuable meanings or aims.
Moreover
, various social problems become common in the society
because
of these movies and the lack of restrictions on the ages watching them such as, suicide among
teenagers
, kids scratching themselves in order to copy what they have
seen
in a film.

In conclusion
, countries
have to
apply harsh
rules
on film makers and force them to
make
films that will benefit the society and the coming generations.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Do you prefer finding information by reading books or searching the internet? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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