Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Do you like to spend time alone or spend time with your friends? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v.1

Do you like to spend time alone or spend time with your friends? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1
In recent years, shopping in online website instead of stores has been a topic of heated debate. While some people argue that online shopping has some detrimental effects of their economic issues, it can be a useful way of shopping. I personally believe that people can search effectively what they want to purchase on online, but there are also drawbacks to taken into account. On the one hand, there are some benefits of online shopping. Firstly, it is a quicker and easier way to shop since people can buy products at home without having go to shop or shopping malls. For example, Amazon and AliExpress are two popular websites that provide a huge number of different products, and customers visit those websites and purchase easily. As a result, customers can save time and travelling costs. Secondly, online shopping allows people to have a wide range of choices as they can compare different brands and products. For instance, buyers can easily compare the shoes of Adidas and Nike, it is difficult to do that at physical stores. On the other hand, online shopping can be negative in several ways. The first drawback is that customers cannot try products before making a purchase. To illustrate, a girl cannot try wearing a dress to see if it fits her body. Furthermore, products sold online are less reliable, and the products which people get delivered to their house may have a poorer quality than expected. Finally, because online shopping is cheaper and easier, people tend to buy too much, which would lead to a large waste of money. In conclusion, although online shopping is faced a variety of problems such as unreliable and wasting of money, these problems are not insurmountable, it has also many positive effects such as cheaper and a wide range of products.
In recent years,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
website
instead
of stores has been a topic of heated debate. While
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
argue that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
detrimental effects of their economic issues, it can be a useful way of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
. I
personally
believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can search
effectively
what they want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
there are
also
drawbacks to taken into account.

On the one hand, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
benefits of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
.
Firstly
, it is a quicker and easier way to shop since
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
at home without having go to shop or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
malls.
For example
, Amazon and AliExpress are two popular websites that provide a huge number of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
, and customers visit those websites and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
easily
.
As a result
, customers can save time and travelling costs.
Secondly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to have a wide range of choices as they can compare
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
brands and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
For instance
, buyers can
easily
compare the shoes of Adidas and Nike, it is difficult to do that at physical stores.

On the other hand
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
can be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
in several ways. The
first
drawback is that customers cannot try
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
making a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
. To illustrate, a girl cannot try wearing a dress to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
if it fits her body.
Furthermore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
sold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
are less reliable, and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
delivered to their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
may have a poorer quality than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
.
Finally
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
is cheaper and easier,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
too much, which would lead to a large waste of money.

In conclusion
, although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
is faced
a variety of problems such as unreliable and wasting of money, these problems are not insurmountable, it has
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
effects such as cheaper and a wide range of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you like to spend time alone or spend time with your friends? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts