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Do you prefer reading e-books or real books? Include details and examples in your explanation. v.1

Do you prefer reading e-books or real books? Include details and examples in your explanation. v. 1
Nowadays, it is now a common occurrence for youths to spend more time with their playmates and less time with members of their family. This is because they find the company of their friends more interesting and, In my opinion, I think that it is highly unnecessary for folks to forcefully enforce their children spending time with them as this will prevent them from developing soft skills. To begin, youngsters prefer hanging out with their friends because they enjoy their company more than that of their parents. In other words, as a result of age difference, both parties might not have common interesting topics to talk about, therefore, resulting in little or no time being spent together. Furthermore, fear of punishment could make it hard for young children to express certain thoughts to their parents, hence, resulting in them turning to their friends as confidant. For example, a recent survey conducted by the society for family health in Nigeria concluded that, 40 percent of parents now find it hard interacting with their children because they would rather spend time on the phone than talking to them. On the other hand, fathers and mothers forcing their young ones to dedicate more time to them would prevent the development of soft skills in the young child. That is, skill set such as communication skills, attitudes, people skills will be poorly developed if playmates are prevented from hanging out. These attributes are necessary for the child in order to interact effectively with members of the public. To exemplify, research has shown that youngsters that spend longer time with their friends tend to be well behaved members of the society as they have top notch interaction skills and express themselves without an hitch. This reinforces why the parents should not force their children to spend more time at home. To conclude, although, children spend more time with their companion because they find them more fun, it is also essential that folks do not coerce their youngsters into spending time with them in order to ensure thay they effectively develop their soft skills.
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with their playmates and less
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with members of their family. This is
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because
they find the
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company
of their
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friends
more interesting and, In my opinion, I
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think
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highly
unnecessary for folks to
forcefully
enforce their
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children
spending
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time
with them as this will
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prevent
them from developing soft
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skills
.

To
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begin
, youngsters prefer hanging out with their
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friends
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because
they enjoy their
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company
more than that of their
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parents
.
In other words
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as a result
of age difference, both parties might not have common interesting topics to talk about,
therefore
, resulting in
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little
or no
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time
being spent
together.
Furthermore
, fear of punishment could
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it
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hard
for young
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children
to express certain thoughts to their
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parents
,
hence
, resulting in them turning to their
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friends
as confidant.
For example
, a recent survey conducted by the society for family health in Nigeria concluded that, 40 percent of
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parents
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now
find it
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hard
interacting with their
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children
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because
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rather
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spend
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time
on the phone than talking to them.

On the other hand
, fathers and mothers forcing their young ones to dedicate more
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time
to them would
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prevent
the development of soft
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skills
in the young child.
That is
,
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set such as communication
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skills
, attitudes,
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people
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skills
will be
poorly
developed if playmates are
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prevented
from hanging out. These attributes are necessary for the child in order to interact
effectively
with members of the public. To exemplify, research has shown that youngsters that
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spend
longer
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time
with their
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friends
tend to be
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well behaved
members of the society as they have
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top notch
interaction
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skills
and express themselves without
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an
hitch. This reinforces why the
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parents
should not force their
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children
to
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spend
more
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time
at home.

To conclude
, although,
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children
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more
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time
with their companion
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because
they find them more fun, it is
also
essential that folks do not coerce their youngsters into spending
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time
with them in order to ensure
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thay
they
effectively
develop their soft
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skills
.
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IELTS essay Do you prefer reading e-books or real books? Include details and examples in your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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