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Do you like to attend a college or university full-time or part-time? Why do you think your choice is better than the other, explain by using details and examples. v.1

Do you like to attend a college or university full-time or part-time? Why do you think your choice is better than the other, explain by using details and examples. v. 1
Some people expect that technology will solve the most critical global environmental issues. While technology will undoubtedly play a significant role in addressing these problems, I believe solutions must also involve a broader social movement. To be sure, environmentally friendly technology has already shown great promise for its ability to tackle global issues. For example, it is now fairly common to see hybrid and fully electric vehicles on the road. The environmental impact of these technologies, at least in my city, has been noticeable. Where I live, air-quality continues to improve. Each year my state reports that we are getting closer and closer to achieving our goal of 100% renewable energy production, all thanks to new clean technologies. These innovations show that, indeed, technical innovation can directly address some of the world’s most pressing environmental problems. However, in many areas, new technologies are not developing or spreading rapidly enough to resolve critical environmental issues. In these situations, the only immediate solution is for people to work collectively by changing behaviors that damage the environment. For example, consider the alarming amount of plastic particles in the world’s oceans. Some technological solutions to this problem are currently in development. I have read about a large sea “vacuum” and even genetically modified animals that can eat plastic. Yet, these solutions may not solve the ocean-plastic problem before it’s too late for ocean ecosystems. Instead, more cities, businesses, and households will need to take steps to limit everyday plastic use. Some grocery stores no longer use plastic bags, for example. Some families choose to use reusable containers for food instead of single-use plastic ones. Changes like these must be adopted by a very large number of people to have a real impact because technological remedies are not yet available. In conclusion, while we should continue to seek technological solutions to environmental problems, these innovations cannot sufficiently address them all. People must work together, on a large scale, to address the most serious issues we face as well.
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environmental
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must
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involve a broader social movement.

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friendly
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technology
has already shown great promise for its ability to tackle global
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issues
.
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, it is
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now
fairly
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see
hybrid and
fully
electric vehicles on the road. The
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environmental
impact of these
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technologies
, at least in my city, has been noticeable. Where I
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live
, air-quality continues to
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improve
. Each year my state reports that we are getting closer and closer to achieving our goal of 100% renewable energy production, all thanks to new clean
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technologies
. These innovations
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show
that,
indeed
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directly
address
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some
of the world’s most pressing
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, consider the alarming amount of
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plastic
particles in the world’s oceans.
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technological
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solutions
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families choose to
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because
technological remedies are not
yet
available.

In conclusion
, while we should continue to seek technological
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solutions
to
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environmental
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problems
, these innovations cannot
sufficiently
address them all.
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People
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must
work together, on a large scale, to address the most serious
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issues
we face
as well
.
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IELTS essay Do you like to attend a college or university full-time or part-time? Why do you think your choice is better than the other, explain by using details and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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