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Do you feel that music is helpful while studying? Why and why not? Give proper opinion and explain with details and examples. v.1

Do you feel that music is helpful while studying? Why and why not? Give proper opinion and explain with details and examples. v. 1
In most of the countries today, everyone has to work irrespective of their gender. Increased competition in the market has encouraged male and female to do their jobs at the same time share household tasks. In my opinion, it's fair enough to distribute the burden equally when one has to reach the greatest heights. Traditionally, women used to stay at home and handle the domestic side of daily activities such as managing children, cleaning, and cooking. And the other major part of the population used to go out to cater money and food to run the home. This was, ideally, suited for earlier times and has its natural and biological reasons. Ladies in those days were meant to do soft skilled things instead of doing hardship of hunting, farming and battling the war. Consequently, the division of responsibilities was adequate enough as per the requirements of the society in history. Modernisation enhanced the complexity and working styles to perform full-time roles changed dramatically in both places. Growing population has challenged the quality and quantity of struggles in man's life over the period of time. Both the sexes are now capable of handling the intense assignments equally with the help of the right techniques and machinery. From flying a jet plane to carving the small piece of jewellery women are as much involved as men. Hence, all this happened only when some father or son or husband or brother has supported her female in household efforts and contributed his part in creating an impartial community. In view of the discussions outlined above, it can be recapitulated that now it is all about using the brain instead of creating grudges for the sake of gender. Both male and female work efficiently only when they fragment their duties equivalently.
In most of the countries
today
, everyone
has to
work irrespective of their gender. Increased competition in the market has encouraged male and female to do their jobs at the same
time share
household tasks. In my opinion, it's
fair
enough
to distribute the burden
equally
when one
has to
reach the greatest heights.

Traditionally
, women
used
to stay at home and handle the domestic side of daily activities such as managing children, cleaning, and cooking. And the other major part of the population
used
to go out to cater money and food to run the home. This was,
ideally
, suited for earlier times and has its natural and biological reasons. Ladies in those days
were meant
to do soft skilled things
instead
of doing hardship of hunting, farming and battling the war.
Consequently
, the division of responsibilities was adequate
enough
as per the requirements of the society in history.

Modernisation
enhanced the complexity and working styles to perform full-time roles
changed
dramatically
in both places. Growing population has challenged the quality and quantity of struggles in
man
's life over the period of time. Both the sexes are
now
capable of handling the intense assignments
equally
with the
help
of the right techniques and machinery. From flying a jet
plane
to carving the
small
piece of
jewellery
women are as much involved as
men
.
Hence
, all this happened
only
when
some
father or son or husband or brother has supported her female in household efforts and contributed his part in creating an impartial community.

In view of the discussions outlined above, it can
be recapitulated
that
now
it is all about using the brain
instead
of creating grudges for the sake of gender. Both male and female work
efficiently
only
when they fragment their duties
equivalently
.
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IELTS essay Do you feel that music is helpful while studying? Why and why not? Give proper opinion and explain with details and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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