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Do you believe that societies ought to enforce capital punishment or are there alternative forms of punishment that would be better used? v.1

Do you believe that societies ought to enforce capital punishment or are there alternative forms of punishment that would be better used? v. 1
Is the death penalty an effective deterrent? I am completely against this kind of abuse. I am strongly opposing the capital punishment as it is inhuman. As you all are aware that human beings are prone to make mistakes from which they learn a lot. It's human psychology to rectify them over a period of time. Instead of imposing the death sentence, the convicted should be given a chance to take corrective measures. It is unmanly to execute a living being. This impacts the rise in violent crime. Disciplinary actions can be taken by thrashing some lower punishments on them. Consider an example of lifetime imprisonment which is almost equivalent to execution. Moreover, this enables the judicial bodies to misuse the penalty due to which innocent people are becoming the victims. The discriminatory attitude depending upon the geographical region, race, ethnicity etc. should be combated. It's a method of the encroachment of the human rights. On the other hand, some of the supporters insist on carrying out of death penalty. They believe that society would be safeguarded through this approach. It demands the reforms in the appeals process which are complex and expensive. There are some cases where the mentally impaired individuals are forced to death lessening their pain. Humans committing crimes is a worldwide accepted fact, but compelling them to death on these grounds is a cruel and unusual punishment. So I firmly defy the capital punishment.
Is the death penalty an effective deterrent? I am completely against this kind of abuse. I am
strongly
opposing the capital
punishment
as it is inhuman.

As
you all are aware that
human
beings are prone to
make
mistakes from which they learn a lot. It's
human
psychology to rectify them over a period of time.
Instead
of imposing the death sentence, the convicted should be
given
a chance to take corrective measures. It is
unmanly
to execute a living being. This impacts the rise in violent crime. Disciplinary actions can
be taken
by thrashing
some
lower
punishments
on them.

Consider an example of lifetime imprisonment which is almost equivalent to execution.
Moreover
, this enables the judicial bodies to misuse the penalty due to which innocent
people
are becoming the victims. The discriminatory attitude depending upon the geographical region, race, ethnicity etc. should
be combated
. It's a method of the encroachment of the
human
rights.
On the other hand
,
some of the
supporters insist on carrying out of death penalty. They believe that society would
be safeguarded
through this approach.

It demands the reforms in the appeals process which are complex and expensive. There are
some
cases where the mentally impaired individuals
are forced
to death lessening their pain.
Humans
committing crimes is a worldwide
accepted
fact,
but
compelling them to death on these grounds is a cruel and unusual
punishment
.
So
I
firmly
defy the capital
punishment
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you believe that societies ought to enforce capital punishment or are there alternative forms of punishment that would be better used? v. 1

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