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Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Using cars has been becoming increasingly common in recent years. Although I think that it maintains some obvious harmful consequences, I strongly believe that the advantages of the car can outweigh its advantages. On the one hand, owning cars has a significant influence on the environment. The first reason is that the growth in travelling by car can lead to a rise in pollution, traffic jams, and accidents. More cars are likely to result in rocketing rate of pollution. Secondly, our dependence on cars can lead to decrease in practices, such as walking and cycling. People may have a higher chance of carrying more potential health risks like obesity and heart attack. On the other hand, there are many reasons why people prefer to own cars. Firstly, it provides people with the freedom of movement. The ease of transportation which a car brings is significant/prominent than any other form of vehicles. For example, you can go from a destination to another destination and no time is wasted waiting for the bus or train. Therefore, time and distance are not barriers anymore. Secondly, personal cars can give comfort while travelling compared to the public transports which are so crowded and disgusting. For instance, you can read books, listen to your favourite songs or even play with kids while you are in your own car but all seems to be impossible on a public transport. Finally, families can go together. This becomes especially helpful when there are elderly, the disabled or even sick members in the families. In conclusion, having a car can lead to a few obvious problems, but I believe that owning a car is the best choice and the benefits that it brings about can outshine its drawbacks.
Using
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has been becoming
increasingly
common in recent years. Although I
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think
that it maintains
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some
obvious harmful consequences, I
strongly
believe that the advantages of the
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car
can outweigh its advantages.

On the one hand, owning
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cars
has a significant influence on the environment. The
first
reason is that the growth in travelling by
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car
can lead to a rise in pollution, traffic jams, and accidents. More
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cars
are likely to result in rocketing rate of pollution.
Secondly
, our dependence on
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cars
can lead to decrease in practices, such as walking and cycling.
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People
may have a higher chance of carrying more potential health
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risks
like obesity and heart attack.

On the other hand
, there are
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many
reasons why
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people
prefer to
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own
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cars
.
Firstly
, it provides
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people
with the freedom of movement. The
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ease
of transportation which a
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car
brings is significant/prominent than any other form of vehicles.
For example
, you can go from a destination to another destination and no time
is wasted
waiting for the bus or train.
Therefore
, time and distance are not barriers anymore.
Secondly
, personal
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cars
can give comfort while travelling compared to the public transports which are
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so
crowded and disgusting.
For instance
, you can read books, listen to your
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favourite
songs or even play with kids while you are in your
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own
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car
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but
all seems to be impossible on
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a public transport
.
Finally
, families can go together. This becomes
especially
helpful when there are elderly, the disabled or even sick members in the families.

In conclusion
, having a
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car
can lead to a few obvious problems,
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but
I believe that owning a
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car
is the best choice and the benefits that it brings about can outshine its drawbacks.
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IELTS essay Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweigh the disadvantages?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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