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do you agree or disagree with this statement? sometimes people think nowadays the media are less concern about the accuracy of news than in the past v.29

sometimes people think nowadays the media are less concern about the accuracy of news than in the past v. 29
In today’s world, media play an indispensable role in the society. This trend prompts a controversial issue of whether or not the accuracy of news is more reliable than what it used to be in the past. I adamantly subscribe to the idea that news is more precise than before. First and foremost, media has become a competitive industry in the way that a fake news can have an irreversible impact on the broadcaster. As a matter of fact, since most of the people have constant access to the internet, if a particular news website or a newspaper publish a inaccurate news, people can easily surf the internet to realize the accuracy of it. Under such circumstance, followers of the website would not trust it anymore. On the other hand, the competitors of the website take advantage of this situation to publish a report which directly targets the website in order to attract more audience. Taken the latest news that I have found recently on a Farsnews as an example. The editor of the website published a report about gross domestic growth (GDP) of Iran economy in 2017 fiscal year. The publisher, however, turning a blind eye to the fact that people can readily find relevant data from various websites including Worldbank. The economic columnist of the website falsely propagated that GDP growth of Iran was under two percent but after visiting the Worldbank, I understood that growth of it in the given period is more than 6 percent. As a result of this inaccuracy, I would not follow this website anymore. More importantly, there are various regulations have been introduced by governments which easily inhibit media from publishing false news. There are various sophisticated lawyers being available in the society in order to sue the principles of the media. Admittedly, this would not only is detrimental for the face of the media in the public but also imposes huge amount money on the shoulder of the source to compensate the targeted person. In a nutshell, I hold the view that news broadcasting in different forms of media is more accurate than ever before since more obligations have been imposed on this industry and people can notice a evaluate the news.
In
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today
’s world,
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media
play an indispensable role in the society. This trend prompts a controversial issue of
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whether or not
the accuracy of
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news
is more reliable than what it
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used
to be in the past. I
adamantly
subscribe to the
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idea
that
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news
is more precise than
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before
.

First
and foremost,
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media
has become a competitive industry in the way that a fake
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news
can have an irreversible impact on the broadcaster. As a matter of fact, since most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have constant access to the internet, if a particular
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news
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website
or a newspaper publish
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a
inaccurate
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news
,
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people
can
easily
surf the internet to realize the accuracy of it. Under such circumstance, followers of the
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website
would not trust it anymore.
On the other hand
, the competitors of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
website
take advantage of this situation to publish a report which
directly
targets the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
website
in order to attract more audience. Taken the latest
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news
that I have found recently on a
Possible spelling mistake found.
Farsnews
as an example. The editor of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
website
published a report about gross domestic growth (GDP) of Iran economy in 2017 fiscal year. The publisher,
however
, turning a blind eye to the fact that
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people
can
readily
find relevant data from various websites including
Possible spelling mistake found.
Worldbank
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
economic columnist of the
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website
falsely
propagated that GDP growth of Iran was under two percent
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
after visiting the
Possible spelling mistake found.
Worldbank
, I understood that growth of it in the
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given
period is more than 6 percent.
As a result
of this inaccuracy, I would not follow this
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website
anymore.

More
importantly
, there are various regulations have
been introduced
by
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governments
which
easily
inhibit
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media
from publishing false
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news
. There are various sophisticated lawyers being available in the society in order to sue the principles of the
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media
.
Admittedly
, this would not
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only
is detrimental for the face of the
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media
in the public
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but
also
imposes huge amount money on the shoulder of the source to compensate the targeted person.

In a nutshell, I hold the view that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
broadcasting in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
forms of
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media
is more accurate than ever
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before
since more obligations have
been imposed
on this industry and
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people
can notice
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a
evaluate the
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news
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay sometimes people think nowadays the media are less concern about the accuracy of news than in the past v. 29

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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