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Do you agree or disagree with this statement? The government is better to pay the budget for building the new projects rather than old buildings. v.22

The government is better to pay the budget for building the new projects rather than old buildings. v. 22
The expense of the erecting or repairing building has been allocated a paramount fund of the country to themselves. In this regard, it is a longstanding debate among the authorities whether they should spend this money on renovating and repair of old buildings or dedicating the budget to erect new buildings. However, there are a lot of proponents and opponents for this topic, I firmly believe it is logical that government pay this fund for new project buildings. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will cogently elaborate on my points of view. The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the old buildings are not as safe as they must be. Hence, the vast majority of engineers believe renovating them is a waste of money. As a case in point, two years ago, earthquake proved that many houses that had been repaired collapsed in the earthquake. In fact, it shows they are not as strong as the new buildings that have been built recently. To reject this idea, the new building must destroy instead of the recently repaired building. Another equally noteworthy reason in corroborating this issue is that most of the old building is placed in the location that now they changed to the highway, street. Owing to the fact, by increasing the population and knowledge of the people the engineers design a proper pattern for the buildings and streets of the city. Therefore, it is axiomatic that some of this building must be destroyed to make the city more appealing. I cite my experience to shed light in this context. Five years ago, we renovated our stores and paid plenty of money for this purpose but the municipal decided to make the street wider. Consequently, not only we had to delete our store but also we remain with myriad loans that we got from the bank. Finally, it is an indisputable fact that historical places are deserved to repair. Because they show the history of the country and the government can absorb more tourists and help the economy of the country. Without a shadow of a doubt, we achieve more profit than something is paid for them. In brief, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that by allocating the budget of the country to the new projects like building a new hospital, school, apartments and other things, not only are we sure about the resistant and safety of them but also we help to the development of the country.
The expense of the erecting or repairing
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building
has
been allocated
a paramount fund of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
to themselves. In this regard, it is a longstanding debate among the authorities whether they should spend this money on renovating and repair of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
or dedicating the budget to erect
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
.
However
, there are
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a lot of
proponents and opponents for this topic, I
firmly
believe it is logical that
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government
pay this fund for
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new
project
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will
cogently
elaborate on my points of view.

The
first
exquisite point to
be mentioned
is that the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
are not as safe as they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be.
Hence
, the vast majority of engineers believe renovating them is a waste of money. As a case in point, two years ago, earthquake proved that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
that had
been repaired
collapsed in the earthquake. In fact, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
they are not as strong as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
that have
been built
recently. To reject this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
, the
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new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroy
instead
of the recently repaired building.

Another
equally
noteworthy reason in corroborating this issue is that most of the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
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building
is placed
in the location that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
to the highway, street. Owing to the fact, by increasing the population and knowledge of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
the engineers design a proper pattern for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
and streets of the city.
Therefore
, it is axiomatic that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of this
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building
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroyed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the city more appealing. I cite my experience to shed light in this context. Five years ago, we renovated our stores and paid
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of money for this purpose
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the municipal decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the street wider.
Consequently
, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
we had to delete our store
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
we remain with myriad loans that we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
from the bank.

Finally
, it is an indisputable fact that historical places
are deserved
to repair.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
the history of the
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country
and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can absorb more tourists and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the economy of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
. Without a shadow of a doubt, we achieve more profit than something
is paid
for them.

In brief
, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that by allocating the budget of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
projects like
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
hospital, school, apartments and other things, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
are we sure about the resistant and safety of them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to the development of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay The government is better to pay the budget for building the new projects rather than old buildings. v. 22

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
414 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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