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A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and building new ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and building new ones. v. 1
Old buildings require large sums of money to be repaired. It is considered by some people that they should be demolished and new one erected. In this essay I will explain the reasons why I agree with this view, but I also think that some buildings should be conserved for future generations. Certainly, it is true that cities are constantly growing due to the migration of people from rural areas and there is scarce of land for constructing new buildings. The old houses were built from long -lasting materials and large amounts of money are needed for their reparation. It seems more reasonable and cost effective to pull them down and build new ones. Another point is that the old houses were smaller compared to ones that are being constructed today in order to better use the land and provide accommodation to a larger number of people. Furthermore, in the inner city skyscrapers are being erected because the land is extremely expensive and high buildings can offer offices to great number of companies. By contrast, there are buildings which are highly valuable and must be preserved for future. In particular, buildings which are of great architectural value or those of historic importance regarding their role in the past. To illustrate this, there is an example of the old pub more than 200 years old in the centre of the city, which was planned by the authorities to be knocked down to make place for the new building. A campaign was raised by dwellers in order to protect the building of the utmost significance for our culture due to its specific architecture, and the authorities had to give up. In conclusion, it appears to me that the most effective way of solving the issue of old buildings is to pull them down and make way for new houses. However, buildings of architectural value and historic places should be properly maintained and repaired for future generations.
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buildings
require large sums of money to
be repaired
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some
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people
that they should
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new
one erected. In this essay I will
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explain
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agree
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also
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think
that
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some
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buildings
should
be conserved
for future generations.

Certainly
, it is true that cities are
constantly
growing due to the migration of
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people
from rural areas and there is scarce of land for constructing
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new
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buildings
. The
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old
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houses
were built
from long -lasting materials and large amounts of money
are needed
for their reparation. It seems more reasonable and cost effective to pull them down and build
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new
ones. Another point is that the
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old
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houses
were smaller compared to ones that are
being constructed
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today
in order to better
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use
the land and provide accommodation to a larger number of
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people
.
Furthermore
, in the inner city skyscrapers are
being erected
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because
the land is
extremely
expensive and high
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buildings
can offer offices to great number of
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companies
.

By contrast, there are
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buildings
which are
highly
valuable and
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must
be preserved
for future.
In particular
,
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buildings
which are of great architectural value or those of historic importance regarding their role in the past. To illustrate this, there is an example of the
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old
pub more than 200 years
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old
in the
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centre
of the city, which
was planned
by the authorities to
be knocked
down to
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make
place for the
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new
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building
. A campaign
was raised
by dwellers in order to protect the
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building
of the utmost significance for our culture due to its specific architecture, and the authorities had to give up.

In conclusion
, it appears to me that the most effective way of solving the issue of
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old
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buildings
is to pull them down and
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make
way for
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new
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houses
.
However
,
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buildings
of architectural value and historic places should be
properly
maintained and repaired for future generations.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and building new ones. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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