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A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and building new one. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and building new one. v. 2
Ancient architecture has become a thing of the past, we are the generation that has witnessed the transformation from conventional methods of construction method to prefabricated streets and till the recent development of 3-D printed buildings. Although development infrastructure and building is costly and time consuming: These efforts can be justified only based on the cost benefit ratio it provides. Therefore, i partially agree, as it would be a better option to renovate old buildings and use them if they fulfil the prerequisites. Firstly, let us compare the quality of the architecture what our ancestors were able to create and what best we can produce today. One of the best examples would be the comparison of the Akshardam Temple at Delhi, which was constructed in the last decade to any ancient palaces or temples. Although the intention behind the construction of Akshardam Temple is to build a magnificent temple repairing the ancient architecture by using the modern technology, but the result of these good efforts is no match to any of those magnificent ancient temples or palaces, which have lasted for many centuries. Many of the older buildings in the northern part of India, namely Rajasthan, Agra, Delhi etc. Been renovated and transformed into restaurants and hotels. This has rejuvenated the look of the building and retained the essence of ancient architecture, thus resulting in a unique luxury experience for the quests who visit the place. Secondly, let us weigh the cost and time that goes into both these efforts, however this would be a subjective analysis considering the structural stability of the building, but considering otherwise; definitely, repairing and renovating the existing buildings would be a cost effective option with the added advantage of the unwanted experience it would provide for its users. Time of construction would again be a subjected discussion considering the technology being used for demolition and construction of new buildings. To conclude, renovation of existing buildings would make life easier if the required prerequisites can be met by doing so or else the only available option would be to demolish and rebuild irrespective of the cost of construction.
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architecture
has become a thing of the past, we are the generation that has witnessed the transformation from conventional methods of
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construction
method to prefabricated streets and till the recent development of 3-D printed
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buildings
. Although development infrastructure and
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building
is costly and
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time consuming
: These efforts can
be justified
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only
based on the
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cost
benefit ratio it provides.
Therefore
,
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i
partially
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agree
, as it would be a better option to renovate
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old
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buildings
and
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use
them if they fulfil the prerequisites.

Firstly
,
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let
us compare the quality of the
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architecture
what our ancestors were able to create and what best we can produce
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today
. One of the best examples would be the comparison of the
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Akshardam
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Temple
at Delhi, which
was constructed
in the last decade to any
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ancient
palaces or
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temples
. Although the intention behind the
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construction
of
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Akshardam
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Temple
is to build a magnificent
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temple
repairing the
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ancient
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architecture
by using the modern technology,
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but
the result of these
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good
efforts is no match to any of those magnificent
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ancient
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temples
or palaces, which have lasted for
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many
centuries.
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Many
of the older
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buildings
in the northern part of India,
namely
Rajasthan, Agra, Delhi etc.
Been renovated
and transformed into restaurants and hotels. This has rejuvenated the look of the
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building
and retained the essence of
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ancient
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architecture
,
thus
resulting in a unique luxury experience for the quests who visit the place.

Secondly
,
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let
us weigh the
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cost
and time that goes into both these efforts,
however
this would be a subjective analysis considering the structural stability of the
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building
,
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but
considering
otherwise
; definitely, repairing and renovating the existing
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buildings
would be a
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cost
effective option with the
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added
advantage of the unwanted experience it would provide for its users. Time of
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construction
would again be a subjected discussion considering the technology being
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used
for demolition and
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construction
of new buildings.

To conclude
, renovation of existing
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buildings
would
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make
life easier if the required prerequisites can
be met
by doing
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so
or else the
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only
available option would be to demolish and rebuild irrespective of the
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cost
of
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construction
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and building new one. v. 2

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