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Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cellphone, online games, and social networking web site. Use specific reasons and examples to suppor v.19

Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cellphone, online games, and social networking web site. Use specific reasons and examples to suppor v. 19
some people think that it is harder to educate kids now than past. Personally, I believe that it is not harder than before. I feel like this fore three reasons which I explore them in the following essay. First of all, they can learn much more with cell phones but we must teach them how they use cell phones. I mean, we can teach them how they can search about exciting topics with cell phones. I remember an experiment about my friend. She' ve never let her son to use the cell phone. I found out that he work with it secretly. I told my friend that let him to use it and it can make him not to work secretly and he won' t face to its consquences. Second of all, if they spend their time on games or something like that it can make their brain more active. using brain to think or decide makes its cells to work much more than before. For instance, I know someone who are master of online games. Once I asked him to fix my computer although he didn' t study lessons or learn about computer. Surprisingly, he could fix my computer and it works better than before because he changed some softwares and installed new ones. Finally, maybe some kids waste their time by playing online games or something like that but at least they don' t go for something worse that these kind of things such as drugs or something. one of my ex neighbors had a son who had been always playing in the alley. one day we realized that he' d smoked drugs with his friends. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that using technology doesn' t make education hard. this is because learning more and being more active and not doing worse deeds than them.
some
people
think
that it is harder to educate kids
now
than past.
Personally
, I believe that it is not harder than
before
. I feel like this fore three reasons which I explore them in the following essay.

First of all
, they can learn much more with
cell
phones
but
we
must
teach them how they
use
cell
phones
. I mean, we can teach them how they can search about exciting topics with
cell
phones
. I remember an experiment about my friend.
She&
#039; ve never
let
her son to
use
the
cell
phone
. I found out that he
work
with it
secretly
. I
told
my friend that
let
him to
use
it and it can
make
him not to
work
secretly and
he
won&
#039; t face to its
consquences
.

Second of all, if they spend their time on games or
something
like that it can
make
their brain more active.
using
brain to
think
or decide
makes
its
cells
to
work
much more than
before
.
For instance
, I know someone who are master of online games. Once I asked him to
fix
my computer although he
didn&
#039; t study lessons or learn about computer.
Surprisingly
, he could
fix
my computer and it works better than
before
because
he
changed
some
softwares
and installed new ones.

Finally
, maybe
some
kids waste their time by playing online games or
something
like that
but
at least they
don&
#039; t go for
something
worse that
these kind
of things such as drugs or
something
.
one
of my ex neighbors had a son who had been always playing in the alley.
one
day we realized that
he&
#039; d smoked drugs with his friends.

In conclusion
, I am of the opinion that using technology
doesn&
#039; t
make
education
hard
.
this
is
because
learning more and being more active and not doing worse deeds than them.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cellphone, online games, and social networking web site. Use specific reasons and examples to suppor v. 19

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
309 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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