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Many companies sell products or services but at the same time cause environmental damage. Someone said it can be stop by ask them to pay penalty, such as a higher tax when they cause the environmental damage. Others said there are better ways to stop them v.2

Many companies sell products or services but at the same time cause environmental damage. Someone said it can be stop by ask them to pay penalty, such as a higher tax when they cause the environmental damage. Others said there are better ways to stop them v. 2
Embracing with various and abandon products in today’s market, we human beings are truly beneficial from the industrial revolution. Manufactures and factories offer costumers high-quality goods at a relatively low price. However, some companies make progress in the cost of environmental damage, which is an absolutely stupid method to develop. According to my perspective, this kind of environment-damaging companies can make changes under some penalty in order to protect the environment. First and foremost, companies and entrepreneurs will do their best to avoid cost like the environmental penalty. As we all know, the profit is the first for any company. If they have to pay a lot of penalties because they damage the environment, they will transform to environmentally friendly or just stop the pollution projects as soon as possible. Many companies, which have transformed successfully, even start programs to protect the environment for the right to avoid high taxes. Companies are not charities but they are willing to do those things to expand their interests. Thus, adjusting taxes to protect the environment will definitely be effective and efficient. In addition, the government can make full use of the penalty from some companies to protect the environment. Tax is the major income for the government. By regulating the tax rate, the government will have more budget to protect the environment. In that case, the government will do more things, such as funding new research for renewable sources, building clean-energy factories, and eliminating pollutants. Thus, the government will help the companies to balance between economic development and environmental preservation. Furthermore, it is not a wise idea to stop these companies or factories. All the factories existing today lead people to a better life and provide customers more varied goods. Closing some companies is an intervention to the market which may cause the price of substitute goods raise. It will damage the interests of both companies’ owners and common people. Also, thousands of workers will lose jobs if the government force a company close when it damages the environment. Unemployment is never welcomed by the government and individuals ether. That is to say, although stopping companies that damage the environment badly can achieve its goal in a short time, numerous social problems will bring up, too. In conclusion, the best way to regulate companies and then protect the environment is to raise taxes in the situation that companies damage the nature severely. Companies will not bankrupt if they make the right decision, and may develop better afterwards.
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today
’s market, we human beings are
truly
beneficial from the industrial revolution. Manufactures and
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factories
offer costumers high-quality
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goods
at a
relatively
low price.
However
,
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some
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companies
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make
progress in the cost of environmental
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damage
, which is an
absolutely
stupid method to develop. According to my perspective, this kind of environment-damaging
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companies
can
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make
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changes
under
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some
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penalty
in order to
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protect
the environment.

First
and foremost,
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companies
and entrepreneurs will do their best to avoid cost like the environmental
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penalty
. As we all know, the profit is the
first
for any
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company
. If they
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have to
pay
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a lot of
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penalties
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because
they
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damage
the
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environment
, they will transform to
environmentally
friendly or
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just
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stop
the pollution projects as
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soon
as possible.
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Many
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companies
, which have transformed
successfully
, even
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start
programs to
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protect
the
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environment
for the right to avoid high
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taxes
.
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Companies
are not charities
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but
they are willing to do those things to expand their interests.
Thus
, adjusting
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taxes
to
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protect
the
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environment
will definitely be effective and efficient.

In addition
, the
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government
can
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make
full
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use
of the
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penalty
from
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some
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companies
to
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protect
the
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environment
.
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Tax
is the major income for the
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government
. By regulating the
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tax
rate, the
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government
will have more budget to
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protect
the
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environment
.
In that case
, the
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government
will do more things, such as funding new research for renewable sources, building clean-energy
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factories
, and eliminating pollutants.
Thus
, the
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government
will
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help
the
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companies
to balance between economic development and environmental preservation.

Furthermore
, it is not a wise
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idea
to
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stop
these
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companies
or
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factories
. All the
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factories
existing
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today
lead
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people
to a better life and provide customers more varied
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goods
. Closing
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some
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companies
is an intervention to the market which may cause the price of substitute
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goods
raise. It will
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damage
the interests of both
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companies’
owners and common
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people
.
Also
, thousands of workers will lose jobs if the
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government
force a
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company
close when it damages the
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environment
. Unemployment is never welcomed by the
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government
and individuals ether.
That is
to say, although stopping
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companies
that
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damage
the
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environment
badly
can achieve its goal in a short time, numerous social problems will bring up, too.

In conclusion
, the best way to regulate
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companies
and then
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protect
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
is to raise
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taxes
in the situation that
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companies
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damage
the nature
severely
.
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Companies
will not bankrupt if they
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make
the right decision, and may develop better afterwards.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
59Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Many companies sell products or services but at the same time cause environmental damage. Someone said it can be stop by ask them to pay penalty, such as a higher tax when they cause the environmental damage. Others said there are better ways to stop them v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
415 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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