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TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site. v.2

TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site. v. 2
In today' s modern life, tankes to the technological breaktroughs and cutting edge innovations in every section of scence, the path of our life has altered dramatically. One of those advanced technologis is In internet. I parsonally subscribe to the view that high-tech advices help in education and also modifey it compeletely. I believe this for two maine reasons; in the following paragraphs, y reasons will be elaborated in on more detail. To began with, I cannot deny the fact that changing system and policies of education based on the modern' s life demands, could be incounter with difficulties. In fact, childern should be teached by the new advents technologis and utilize them in the schools and education places. To delve more into it, cellfones could use as a devices that teachers inform students homeworkes and projects and wants them to be more in reallationes. For example, My son used his selfone for making a school project for his class, nether does ot distracted him from his homeworks, but he could use as the advantages of that for better working. this points indicate that with alternig the perspectives, its merites outweigh its demerites. The other reasons why I believe that educating of today' s kids is not difficult that past is that they fostered by their devices such as socil networkes, internet, and online games, to name but the handful. they are more capale than last generations. take a young childern as an example. they access to varius data and information before lunch to schools. I know someone who memorized all of the flags of countiries throughouth the world because he palys with on-line games that theach him this. sould we count on tech, we could take high benefiths of it. drawing upon the reasons that mentioned above, althogh there are several expections that can be excluded from general ruels, I believe that educations is no diffecult today. not only is it atributed to beter educations, but also nutured them in prosses of learning.
In
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today&
#039; s modern life,
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tankes
to the technological
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breaktroughs
and cutting edge innovations in every section of
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scence
, the path of our life has altered
dramatically
. One of those advanced
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technologis
is In internet. I
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parsonally
subscribe to the view that high-tech advices
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help
in
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education
and
also
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modifey
it
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compeletely
. I believe this for two
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maine
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reasons
; in the following paragraphs, y
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reasons
will
be elaborated
in on more detail.

To began with, I cannot deny the fact that changing system and policies of
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education
based on the
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modern&
#039; s life demands, could be
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incounter
with difficulties. In fact,
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childern
should be
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teached
by the new advents
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technologis
and utilize them in the schools and
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education
places. To delve more into it,
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cellfones
could
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use
as
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a devices
that teachers inform students
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homeworkes
and projects and wants them to be more in
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reallationes
.
For example
, My son
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used
his
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selfone
for making a school project for his
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class
, nether does
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ot
distracted him from his
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homeworks
,
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but
he could
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use
as the advantages of that for better working.
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this
points indicate that with
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alternig
the perspectives, its
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merites
outweigh its
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demerites
.

The other
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reasons
why I believe that educating of
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today&
#039; s kids is not difficult that past is that they fostered by their devices such as
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socil
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networkes
, internet, and online games, to name
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but
the handful.
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they
are more
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capale
than last generations.
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take
a young
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childern
as an example.
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they
access to
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varius
data and information
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before
lunch to schools. I know someone who memorized
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all of the
flags of
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countiries
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throughouth
the world
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because
he
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palys
with on-line games that
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theach
him this.
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sould
we count on tech, we could take high
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benefiths
of it.

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drawing
upon the
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reasons
that mentioned above,
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althogh
there are several
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expections
that can
be excluded
from general
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ruels
, I believe that
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educations
is no
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diffecult
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today
.
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not
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only
is it
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atributed
to
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beter
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educations
,
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but
also
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nutured
them in
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prosses
of learning.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
51Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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