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Do you agree or disagree with this statement? The best way to learn about a foreign country is to read newspapers and magazines from that country. v.18

The best way to learn about a foreign country is to read newspapers and magazines from that country. v. 18
There is no doubt that everyone likes to gather unlimited information of many countries in this planet. Many ways of consuming details exist nowadays, such as television, newspapers and magazine, including Internet. Ever though, some people believe that the best way to learn about a foreign countries is to read newspapers and magazines for that country, I disagree with the statement as following. To begin with, newspapers and magazines are able to lead misrepresenting to readers. In fact, authors of published companies mostly write information based on their thoughts, the readers who do not know the facts will get wrong ideas. Give a situation of politics in Thailand for instance. In general, Thai people are kind and peaceful. Since there was an enormous corruption in Thailand, educated people were trying to protest Thailand’s government. However, the prime minister was so astute and dirty. She forced every television’s channel and newspapers to mislead an understanding of people. So, the foreigners who do not know the real situation or the true story will think Thai people do not believe in democracy. In addition, transporting newspapers and magazine across countries takes time; therefore, information from those sources is outdated. For example, as we know a distance between The United Stated (U. S) and Thailand is far. It takes at least 10 days to transfer newspapers and magazines from Thailand to US. People living in US have to read the old newspapers and the magazines, and cannot catch up the situation of Thailand on time. In conclusion, in this century, there are several solutions that we can use for learning or consuming information of other countries. Reading newspapers and magazine is no longer be the best method due to misrepresentation and outdating method. Needless to say, we should not focus just only one way of searching the facts.
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information
of
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many
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countries
in this planet.
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ways of consuming
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details
exist nowadays, such as television,
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newspapers
and
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magazine
, including Internet.
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though,
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some
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people
believe that the best way to learn about a foreign
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countries
is to read
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newspapers
and
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magazines
for that
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country
, I disagree with the statement as following.

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with,
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newspapers
and
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magazines
are able to lead misrepresenting to readers. In fact, authors of published
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companies
mostly
write
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information
based on their thoughts, the readers who do not know the facts will
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get
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wrong
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ideas
. Give a situation of politics in Thailand
for instance
.
In general
, Thai
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people
are kind and peaceful. Since there was an enormous corruption in Thailand, educated
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people
were trying to protest Thailand’s
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government
.
However
, the prime minister was
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so
astute and dirty. She forced every television’s channel and
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newspapers
to mislead an understanding of
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people
.
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So
, the foreigners who do not know the real situation or the true story will
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think
Thai
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people
do not believe in democracy.

In addition
, transporting
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newspapers
and
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magazine
across
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countries
takes time;
therefore
,
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information
from those sources
is outdated
.
For example
, as we know a distance between The United Stated (U. S) and Thailand is far. It takes at least 10 days to transfer
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newspapers
and
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magazines
from Thailand to US.
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People
living in US
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have to
read the
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old
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newspapers
and the
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magazines
, and cannot catch up the situation of Thailand on time.

In conclusion
, in this century, there are several solutions that we can
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use
for learning or consuming
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information
of other
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countries
. Reading
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newspapers
and
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magazine
is no longer be the best method due to misrepresentation and
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outdating
method. Needless to say, we should not focus
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just
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only
one way of searching the facts.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to learn about a foreign country is to read newspapers and magazines from that country. v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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