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Drug abuse, is becoming increasingly common in the world today. What are some of the problems associated with drug abuse and what are some of the measures that can be taken to solve these problems? v.2

Drug abuse, is becoming increasingly common in the world today. What are some of the problems associated with drug abuse and what are some of the measures that can be taken to solve these problems? v. 2
It is an indisputable fact that drug misuse has become more popular from all walks of life. This essay will examine the rationale for this development, and suggest the feasible behind solutions to this. There are several problems as a result of drug addiction but the main problems related to health consequences and a higher rates of crime. Looking first at the former, people who have a tendency to overdose drugs might be unable functional brain normally and put them-self in danger. This may lead them to require staying in hospital for long-lasting treatment with financial burden on them and their family. Another problem is after using drugs too much for a long time, they are likely to face with financial issues so burglary and robbery consider to be instant ways to get over this. Consequently, they become social burden as an undeniable fact. Apart from the aforementioned problems, the first solution is to educated them about the danger of using drug abuse. It is vital play a role to avoid them causing mistake to affect society and protect their health. The second rationale is that families need to encourage them by love and compassion, it help addicts to be more appreciated. In conclusion, although overdosing drugs are able to cause many issues, steps can be taken to tackle these problems.
It is an indisputable fact that
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drug
misuse has become more popular from all walks of life. This essay will examine the rationale for this development, and suggest the feasible behind solutions to this.

There are several
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problems
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of
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drug
addiction
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the main
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problems
related to health consequences and a higher rates of crime. Looking
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at the former,
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people
who have a tendency to overdose
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drugs
might be unable functional brain
normally
and put them-self in
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danger
. This may lead them to require staying in hospital for long-lasting treatment with financial burden on them and their family. Another
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problem
is after using
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drugs
too much for a long time, they are likely to face with financial issues
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so
burglary and robbery consider to be instant ways to
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get
over this.
Consequently
, they become social burden as an undeniable fact.

Apart from the aforementioned
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problems
, the
first
solution is to educated them about the
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danger
of using
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drug
abuse. It is vital play a role to avoid them causing mistake to affect society and protect their health. The second rationale is that families need to encourage them by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and compassion, it
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help
addicts to be more appreciated.

In conclusion
, although overdosing
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drugs
are able to cause
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many
issues, steps can
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to tackle these
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IELTS essay Drug abuse, is becoming increasingly common in the world today. What are some of the problems associated with drug abuse and what are some of the measures that can be taken to solve these problems? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
221 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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