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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Newspapers and magazines are the best ways to learn about a foreign country. v.219

Newspapers and magazines are the best ways to learn about a foreign country. v. 219
I am in full agreement with the perspective that preparing and consuming meals at home is a superior option than feasting out in restaurants. Although many people still intake or rely on street and processed food in spite knowing the nutrition value of such food. On the one hand, there are some significant advantages of home-cooked meals. The primary benefits is the utilization of healthier food, organic vegetables and a large variety of food choice to prepare mouth-watering but high-value dishes. In contrast, restaurants use frozen items, preservatives and high proportion of oil in serving customers which leads to several health problems. Furthermore, families can save more money by cooking and eating at home. For example, a dish costs much less to prepare when the ingredients are purchased from the grocery stores than paying ready-made meals. On the other hand, eating out in the restaurant brings some pros besides their cons. First of all, the restaurant is a place for families gathering to enjoy the ambiance of an exotic place in their dinner. Moreover, dinning out changes the atmosphere around the family, creating excitement or even markers for some special events such as birthdays or anniversaries. Indeed, people can save up their time by eating out, employees who work for long hour rarely have time to prepare their meal; they would rather eat out. In conclusion, I firmly believe that cooking and dining at home is better than consuming food from street or restaurant. People can save up money and have healthier meals from home-cooked dishes but occasionally, families should hang out for dinner for a change.
I am in full agreement with the perspective that preparing and consuming
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meals
at home is a superior option than feasting out in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurants
. Although
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
still
intake or rely on street and processed
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food
in spite knowing the nutrition value of such food.

On the one hand, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
significant advantages of home-cooked
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meals
. The primary benefits is the utilization of healthier
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
, organic vegetables and a large variety of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
choice to prepare mouth-watering
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
high-value dishes.
In contrast
,
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restaurants
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
frozen items, preservatives and high proportion of oil in serving customers which leads to several health problems.
Furthermore
,
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families
can save more money by cooking and eating at home.
For example
, a dish costs much less to prepare when the ingredients are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
from the grocery stores than paying ready-made meals.

On the other hand
, eating out in the
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restaurant
brings
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some
pros
besides
their cons.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, the
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restaurant
is a place for
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families
gathering to enjoy the ambiance of an exotic place in their dinner.
Moreover
, dinning out
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
the atmosphere around the
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family
, creating excitement or even markers for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
special
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
such as birthdays or anniversaries.
Indeed
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can save up their time by eating out, employees who work for long hour rarely have time to prepare their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meal
; they would
rather
eat out.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that cooking and dining at home is better than consuming
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
from street or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
can save up money and have healthier
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meals
from home-cooked dishes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
occasionally
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
families
should hang out for dinner for a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Newspapers and magazines are the best ways to learn about a foreign country. v. 219

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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