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Do you agree or disagree with the statement University students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study v.2

University students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study v. 2
Science has an important role in our society. Everything we have seen nowadays is part of science improvement. For instance, cars, the TV, and the food we eat today come from it. Therefore, I definitely agree that all students should take basic science courses for some reasons. To begin with, through the study of science students develops team work. Some of the assignments given by chemistry require a partnership work. For example, in my first year of university, I saw an organic biology course as a basic science. There, I had to perform the work as a team player with my classmates. In one opportunity, we have to make a soup as an assignment. While one of my friends made the solution, I had to weight the powders to mix with the solution. If somebody failed his job, the whole experiment would be ruined. Although my field of study was not science, I appreciate the skill I developed there. This lesson of working in teams only is provided by assisting to science courses. Second, learning science is fundamental to our life because this subject is part of our everyday. Understanding basic scientific knowledge enables a person to grasp details of his surroundings. For example, a few days ago, I was sick with a stomach ache. The doctor was telling me what was wrong with my body. While he was talking to me, I remember the basic knowledge from my biology classes from the school. Since I acquired this information early in my life as part of my formation, I was able to understand the reasons of my illness. I am positive that if I did not learn this previously, I could not know what the professional in medicine was talking about. Finally, developing critical thinking is one of the greatest advantages of studying science. While art helps students to be creative, scientific knowledge enables people to develop new thoughts. For example, while studying in high school, I learned about the creation of the universe theories. Two are the most popular; the theories of evolution and creation. Since some supporters state that god created the planet, others believe we become from apes. Therefore, I understood that I can disagree with both theories and have my own truth. Hence, I believe in both theories, so I do not stay attached to just one. To sum up, I concur that students should see basic science even though they are studying a career does not involve it. Students develop teamwork and critical thinking skills. Moreover, this subject forms part of our daily basis, so we must understand it in order to keep going with our life.
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has an
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role in our society. Everything we have
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seen
nowadays is
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improvement.
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today
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that all
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should take
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basic
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science
courses for
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some
reasons.

To
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begin
with, through the study of
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science
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students
develops team work.
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Some of the
assignments
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given
by chemistry require a partnership work.
For example
, in my
first
year of university, I
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saw
an organic biology course as a
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basic
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science
. There, I had to perform the work as a team player with my classmates. In one opportunity, we
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have to
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make
a soup as an assignment. While one of my friends made the solution, I had to weight the powders to mix with the solution. If somebody failed his job, the whole experiment would
be ruined
. Although my field of study was not
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science
, I appreciate the
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skill
I developed there. This lesson of working in teams
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only
is provided
by assisting to
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science
courses.

Second, learning
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science
is fundamental to our life
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because
this subject is
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part
of our
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everyday
. Understanding
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basic
scientific knowledge enables a person to grasp
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details
of his surroundings.
For example
, a few days ago, I was sick with a stomach ache. The doctor was telling me what was
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wrong
with my body. While he was talking to me, I remember the
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basic
knowledge from my biology classes from the school. Since I acquired this information early in my life as
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part
of my formation, I was able to understand the reasons of my illness. I am
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positive
that if I did not learn this previously, I could not know what the professional in medicine was talking about.

Finally
, developing critical thinking is one of the greatest advantages of studying
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science
. While art
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helps
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students
to be creative, scientific knowledge enables
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people
to develop new thoughts.
For example
, while studying in high school, I learned about the creation of the universe
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theories
. Two are the most popular; the
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theories
of evolution and creation. Since
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some
supporters state that god created the planet, others believe we become from apes.
Therefore
, I understood that I can disagree with both
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theories
and have my
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own
truth.
Hence
, I believe in both
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theories
,
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so
I do not stay attached to
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just
one.

To sum up, I concur that
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students
should
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basic
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science
even though
they are studying a career does not involve it.
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develop teamwork and critical thinking
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skills
.
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, this subject forms
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part
of our daily basis,
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we
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understand it in order to
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IELTS essay University students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
442 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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