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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People will spend less time in cooking or preparing food in twenty years than nowadays. v.654

People will spend less time in cooking or preparing food in twenty years than nowadays. v. 654
Cooking has been part of human' s life since our ancestors’ age. The way their prepared the food was different to the way we do nowadays. Scientists have designed food easy to prepare to improve our quality of life. Therefore, I believe in the future people will spend less time cooking for some reasons. To begin with, more technology will be available twenty years from now. Thus, more research could be done to reduce the time individuals will be in the chicken. For example, I read in a magazine about a pill a person could take to eat instead of preparing food. Moreover, this article described the tablet will have all the nutrients one needs, such as carbohydrates, proteins, and fat. This does not surprise me since I know that Astronauts receive something similar when they go out of orbit. The idea of the pill may sound improbable, but after we have seen all the improvement we have received from science everything is possible. Furthermore, companies need to increase productivity in workers. Hence, if they find a way to minimize the time labors spend cooking, they could work more efficiently. For example, preparing food causes a lot of stress in some persons. Therefore, the works are the first interested in reducing the stress in their workers, so they can perform effectively when working. Moreover, when people at job do not eat, they tend to change their humor. For instance, one of my coworkers needs to ingest her food on time; otherwise she will be cranky the rest of the day. As a result, her work suffers from being outstanding to be mediocre, and all this is caused by food deficiency. Thus, the companies are motivated the most to find a solution for this problem, so labors quality of work does not be alter by nutrients' deficiency or stress. Finally, in twenty years food would be available because of people demand. If a number of people request for more easy diet to be ready fast, more aliments would be mass produce. As my professor of economy says, the customer decides how the market is redirected. In this case when consumers start to ask for aliments because they do not want to spend lots of time cooking, more fast food will be available for everyone. It is just a matter of time until we begin to see all these supplies at the grocery store. To conclude, I definitely concur that in the future more ingredients and components of food will be easier to be prepared. As I stated previously in my paragraph, everything has changed since prehistoric time until now, so why cooking will stay the same in the future? It is more logical to think that new innovation regarding cuisine is coming
Cooking has been part of
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human&
#039; s life since our ancestors’ age. The way their prepared the
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food
was
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different
to the way we do nowadays. Scientists have designed
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food
easy to prepare to
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improve
our quality of life.
Therefore
, I believe in the future
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people
will spend less
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time
cooking for
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some
reasons.

To
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begin
with, more technology will be available twenty years from
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now
.
Thus
, more research could
be done
to
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reduce
the
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time
individuals will be in the chicken.
For example
, I read in a magazine about a pill a person could take to eat
instead
of preparing
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food
.
Moreover
, this article
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
described
the tablet will have all the nutrients one needs, such as carbohydrates, proteins, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fat
. This does not surprise me since I know that Astronauts receive something similar when they go out of orbit. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of the pill may sound improbable,
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but
after we have
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seen
all the improvement we have received from science everything is possible.

Furthermore
,
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companies
need to increase productivity in workers.
Hence
, if they find a way to minimize the
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time
labors spend cooking, they could
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work
more
efficiently
.
For example
, preparing
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food
causes
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a lot of
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stress
in
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some
persons.
Therefore
, the works are the
first
interested in reducing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
in their workers,
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so
they can perform
effectively
when working.
Moreover
, when
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people
at job do not eat, they tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their humor.
For instance
, one of my coworkers needs to ingest her
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food
on
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time
;
otherwise
she will be cranky the rest of the day.
As a result
, her
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work
suffers from being outstanding to be mediocre, and all this
is caused
by
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food
deficiency.
Thus
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
are motivated
the most to find a solution for this problem,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
labors quality of
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work
does not be
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alter
by
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nutrients&
#039; deficiency or
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stress
.

Finally
, in twenty years
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food
would be available
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because
of
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people
demand. If a number of
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people
request for more easy diet to be ready
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
, more aliments would be mass produce. As my professor of economy says, the customer decides how the market
is redirected
.
In this case
when consumers
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start
to
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ask for
aliments
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because
they do not want to spend lots of
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time
cooking, more
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fast
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food
will be available for everyone. It is
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just
a matter of
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time
until we
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begin
to
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see
all these supplies at the grocery store.

To conclude
, I definitely concur that in the future more ingredients and components of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
will be easier to
be prepared
. As I stated previously in my paragraph, everything has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
since prehistoric
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time
until
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now
,
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so
why cooking will stay the same in the future? It is more logical to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that new innovation regarding cuisine is
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coming
22Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay People will spend less time in cooking or preparing food in twenty years than nowadays. v. 654

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
460 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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